Talk:Darah dan Doa/GA1

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Reviewer: Albacore (talk · contribs) 16:57, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

• No dead links, no DAB links

• Does "National Film Day" deserve to be red linked?

• Perhaps. I'll link it.22:53, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

• If I follow Indonesian copyright correctly, this movie in the PD, right? If so a screenshot could be useful for the "plot" section.

• PD in Indonesia, but films had different copyright terms than photographs when the URAA came into effect (films were 50 post-publication, photographs were 25 post-publication). As such, it's not free in the US. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:53, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

• I'm basing that point off of the copyright tag at File:Usmar Ismail Perfini booklet p29-restoration.JPG, which I assume is OK.

• Telling the story of the leader of the Siliwangi Division and its leader Captain Sudarto on a march to West Java, ... Confusing sentence, and ambiguous as to the meaning.

• D'oh! Trimmed — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:53, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

• The "Bahasa Indonesia" language version has the running length at "128 menit" but ours has 48. Which one is it? I also see "Distribusi Spectra Film Exchange" in the other language's infobox. Worth checking out.

• Neither, the version on YouTube (not linked here because it's not PD in the US) is 94 minutes. Added Spectra. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:53, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

• Footnotes all go to sources. Anwar, Rosihan (2004) and Susanto, A. Budi (2003) need a |trans_title and a |language pararmeter.

• Done. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:53, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

• Perhaps [1] could be used as a reference or external link. According to .id it belongs to the government.

• Most of the information was already in our article, but I found a bit that was useful. Added — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:01, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

I will review the prose when these comments are responded to. Albacore (talk) 16:57, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

• The URL you used from reference 4 is incorrect.

• D'oh! Done. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:57, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

• After putting down a communist rebellion in Madiun, killing numerous members of the Communist Party of Indonesia in the process, Sudarto meets with an Indo woman named Connie, who is originally from Bandung. Ambiguous, and I think this sentence should be split.

• copy edited. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:57, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

• leaving Leo in charge Who was Leo?

• Another officer. Added. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:57, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

• One night, as he reads his diary, Sudarto is accosted a man whose relatives were killed in Madiun perhaps wikt link accost, and I think you mean "accosted by".

• I think accost is fairly common, so no Wikt. Added by, good catch. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:57, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

• There must be a link for "Presidential Palace"

• Source isn't clear whether it was the one in Jakarta (most likely) Bogor, Yogyakarta (doubtful), or another one. The president has at least 6. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:57, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

Those are the only concerns I could find. I will pass after these are responded to. Albacore (talk) 23:45, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

• Thanks for the review! — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:57, 19 January 2013 (UTC)

Quotes

...often cited as the first "Indonesian" film....

– Why is Indonesian in quotes? Sca (talk) 14:38, 30 March 2017 (UTC)