Talk:Cyclone Herold

To do

Not bad for a first article, @Chicdat:! I rated the article as start class, mostly because the storm was so recent, and there might be more info out there. Here are some other things to do to improve the article.

• Full citations for the references - see template:Cite web
• More impacts for Mascarene Islands (any effects on Reunion?)
• For numbers ten and under, spell them out, but for numbers 11 and up, write them as numbers.
• Avoid long quotes, like "Andry Rasolomampionona, a resident of Madagascar living near the Andranofotsy River area said on 16 March, "Those near the Andranofotsy River are most affected by Herold, but fortunately, in the past day, water level has decreased in Fokontany."" - instead, integrate this information into the narrative
• Were there four or five deaths? The article is inconsistent.

♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 15:10, 27 March 2020 (UTC)

The lead needs to be longer, and some of the writing needs to be improved for it to be C-class. For instance, don't start sentences with a number. Also, for impact sections, articles generally start by describing the storm's meteorology impacts on an area (rainfall total, wind gusts, storm surge, etc). Then there should be a paragraph on impacts, like deaths, houses damaged, etc. You mention - "he had just put his herd of oxen in a safe place when he suddenly disappeared in Mahalevona. Around 6 p.m. that day, his body was found." - this is too much detail, and it's not even an unusual death. It sounds like it was just one of the four (or five) deaths. The article should be written from the perspective of a historian, but the article instead looks like it's written in real time. For instance, "An update on 18 March confirmed another death." - there's no need to say updates to the death toll, just that there were five deaths. Also, you say "4,315 people were impacted by Herold in Maroantsetra alone", but start the paragraph with "which impacted more than 3,203 people". Clearly it's more than 3,200 people affected if 4,315 were affected in the one location. I don't usually like mentioning the number of people affected, because it's a pretty weak metric, and there are more useful terms to include, such as the number of people left homeless by the storm, or the number of people requiring some form of assistance. For all of that, I disagree with the article being C-class. Chicdat, for the future, you shouldn't assess articles you have written. I can help provide resources with this article if you want to improve it to C-class, as it's not there yet. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 15:11, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

Sorry. I didn't know all this... I'm still a new user. 🐔Chicdat ^ChickenDatabase 09:58, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

No problem at all Chicdat, it takes time to learn all of this. Hope the comments help! :) ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 13:10, 23 April 2020 (UTC)