Talk:Curriculum for Wales (2022–present)/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 07:20, 29 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:47, 26 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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This one has sat for a while, so fresh eyes might also find other things to change. I found this article actually approachable even though my knowledge of UK education is quite limited, so kudos there. Really all that is needed are some copy tweaks. 7-day hold to Llewee. Ping me when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 05:47, 26 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Copy changes

Lead

aged three to sixteen years old Should this not be just aged three to sixteen years?

History

No need to capitalize "Education" in the phrase "Education in Scotland"
Add a comma after "variety of changes" to improve reading

Instruction

Make "aged from 3 to 16" "aged three to sixteen" to be consistent with the lead.
"Emphasise" should be "emphasis".
Add a comma after the quotation of "Areas of Learning and Experience" to aid reading and another after "broad way"
Remove the serial comma in Literacy, numeracy, and digital competence for consistency with other passages.

Assessment

One of Donaldson's initial recommendations for the new curriculum was that school should be made into more of a single "journey" for a child rather than the way he argued pupils and teachers had previously seen the process as a series of shorter chunks. A comma after "child" would help reading a lot.
Add "into" after "key stages" and remove it from after "broken" to avoid it hanging

Response

The headteacher said that in her view; Change the semicolon into a comma.
The two quotes in the last paragraph that start with capital letters should be changed to start with lowercase letters. MOS:CONFORM recommends this: When quoting a complete sentence, it is usually recommended to keep the first word capitalized. However, if the quoted passage has been integrated into the surrounding sentence (for example, with an introduction such as "X said that"), the original capital letter may be lower-cased. Because they have been integrated, the period should go outside the quotation marks.
De-capitalize "judicial review" and add commas after "new curriculum" and "biased" to create an appositive.

Sourcing and spot checks

Earwig mostly flags the big blockquote from the headteacher as well as some terms of art that can't be replaced (such as "Areas of Learning and Experience"). I really don't see anything major in that regard.

Reference 24 should list "Shropshire Star" as a work instead of "www.shropshirestar.com".

Five sources were selected for spot checks:

8: Education Wales official material. This is an FAQ used twice and represented correctly in the article for its claims as to the new curriculum emphasizing "skills and experiences, as well as knowledge" and reassuring traditional subjects remain. Y
19: 2019 news article on the scrapping of national tests in Wales for personalized assessments: Personalised Assessments will replace paper tests completely by 2021 - just before Wales’ new curriculum comes in from 2022. Y
20: Not much to say, but I guess A consultation on what the changes mean for GCSEs, and what they should look like under the changes, is now under way, led by exam regulator Qualifications Wales. substantiates the idea that GCSEs will change. Y
25: The group have said parents are being "denied their time-honoured right" to remove their child from sex education. Y
27: Correct reproduction of Steyn's quote. Y

Images

There is one image. It is actually the PDF of the Curriculum and Assessment (Wales) Act 2021, licensed under OGL.

I've made the changes you suggested to the text. I'm happy to make any other changes needed.--Llewee (talk) 11:31, 26 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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