Talk:Clown (Mariah Carey song)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ippantekina (talk · contribs) 04:41, 20 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
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b. (citations to reliable sources):

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d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
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b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

@Heartfox: @MaranoFan: I am seeing that there is an active GAN opened since May. Might you please explain? Ippantekina (talk) 04:42, 20 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

There were no comments in two weeks so I closed it as per WP:GAN/I#N4a. Heartfox (talk) 15:35, 20 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Overall a well-written article, but I do have a few suggestions re the prose:

"Clown" is an answer song that addresses comments rapper Eminem made about her in the media and on The Eminem Show (2002) track "Superman" → "Clown" is an answer song to the comments that rapper Eminem made about Carey in the media and on the 2022 track "Superman"
- Done
and "The Night I Fell in Love" by the Pet Shop Boys → the Pet Shop Boys' "The Night I Feel in Love" to make it consistent
- Done
Also consider adding release years to the said songs
- Added
"Carey performed "Clown" in a circus-themed segment during the 2003–2004 Charmbracelet World Tour while two puppeteers controlled an Eminem look-alike on stage." → On the Charmbracelet World Tour, Carey performed... while...
- Done
"while promoting the project" → promoting the album
- Done
"It features background vocals by Carey and Trey Lorenz" → The song features
- Done
I wouldn't cite the lyrics from the booklet (WP:NOTLYRICS) unless they were quoted and discussed by the scholarly sources/reviews
- I cut down on the lyrics
"a worthy exception to the album's formula" any more context as to what "formula" means here?
- Added a note and changed "formula" to "theme"
Not sure if "juxtaposed with" is the right wording... I'd just use "compared to"
- Done
Rest of prose looks good! Kudos to the scholarly sources that you found :) Ippantekina (talk) 08:57, 22 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Nice work, Heartfox. I did a quick spotcheck and no issues turned out. Sourcing is appropriately formatted. The article looks ready for a GA :) Passing-- Ippantekina (talk) 07:12, 26 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]