Talk:Antonio Dini/GA1

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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 17:20, 25 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 17:20, 25 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Prelim

File:Antonio Dini (cropped).jpg needs US PD

PD-1996 tag added. Zawed (talk) 10:35, 27 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

No duplicated links
Earwig reports copyvio unlikely
No edit wars

Lede and infobox

"Dini joined the RAF in 1938"

Done. Zawed (talk) 10:41, 27 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Service number, from CWGC, can be added to infobox (and cited there)

Done but not cited (yet), I will look to work it into the article body somewhere and cite it there. Zawed (talk) 10:41, 27 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Done, Martyn serves as the cite for the service number. Zawed (talk) 05:37, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Place of burial, as Hawkinge Cemetery, could be added to infobox

Done. Zawed (talk) 10:41, 27 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Why not include Dini's other unit(s)?

I had listed the one that he was most prominent for, but have added the others now. Zawed (talk) 10:41, 27 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Royal Air Force

Link commission

Done. Zawed (talk) 10:44, 27 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hatfield Aerodrome is capitalised as such in its article?

Fixed. Zawed (talk) 10:44, 27 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The article doesn't make clear that Uxbridge is an RAF base, one has to read the linked article to discover that it's not just Uxbridge. Also, you use "RAF Ford" later on but only "Uxbridge" here.

Rephrased. Zawed (talk) 10:44, 27 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Suggest adding that the FAA was part of the Royal Navy, for the historically challenged among readers

Done. Zawed (talk) 05:14, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Would be nice to have at least one more date in between December 1937 and January 1939

Have added. Zawed (talk) 05:14, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I know this is unlikely, but any reason behind the secondment? Seems strange for a new RAF pilot especially

Nothing in the sources indicates a reason. Zawed (talk) 05:14, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"He was subsequently assigned" a date here would make the subsequent "Later in the year" less ambigious

Have revised this. Zawed (talk) 05:14, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"assigned to the RAF's School of Naval Co-operation" does this mean he was training there or just flying from the same place as the school?

It is not entirely clear. You will see I have revised this a little - he went to 751 Squadron and reviewing the article for that unit, it was involved in training observers. This make me think that he may have been a staff pilot, by this stage at least. Regardless, the sources don't specify this. Zawed (talk) 05:14, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Second World War

Link Second World War

Done. Zawed (talk) 05:34, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Again, a date some time between his injuries and joining his new squadron would be useful to the reader

Date of posting added. Zawed (talk) 05:34, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Link scrambled

Done. Zawed (talk) 05:34, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"Dini made three more sorties" to avoid too many "he"s in short succession

Done. Zawed (talk) 05:34, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Link sorties

Done. Zawed (talk) 05:34, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Interesting that the date of the squadron's withdrawal from France isn't exact?

I have changed the date slightly here, the original date was when the ground personnel left France but no exact date is given for flying personnel. The new date is when the squadron began reassembling at Croydon. The source (Rawlings) notes that the squadron's records for the period were lost. Zawed (talk) 05:34, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Suggest explicitly saying what No. 605 was flying; one might assume he was flying a Hurricane up to Scotland because it was what he had previously used rather than what he was to use in the future

Done. Zawed (talk) 05:34, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Link dive

Done. Zawed (talk) 05:34, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

What's the extra kill that Shores and Williams list? I may have missed one, but right now I'm counting 4 destroyed, 2 shared, 2 damaged, 3 possibles

Good catch, turns out I had missed one aerial victory entirely (and put one of the probables on the wrong day). I have revised the description of the engagements in France/Belgium to remedy this. Zawed (talk) 05:34, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

References

References look good. AGF on print sources.

@Zawed: Hi, that's all I have for now. Will await responses. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 20:32, 25 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Pickersgill-Cunliffe: Thanks for taking a look at this, I have revised the article in response to your feedback plus replied to some your comments above, please check to see that all is in order. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 05:36, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Zawed: Happy with your edits. Passing this as satisfying the GA criteria. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 10:29, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]