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Cimm's suggestions for this article (2007-05-09)

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Here are some suggestions on how this article could be improved:

Lead
  • 2-3 sentences should be added summarizing the main points of the rest of the article (see WP:LEAD for more info)
  • Added a few more sentences to the lead - Erdling 08:45, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
Early Life and Family
  • The article could benefit from more contextual information in this section. What was going on in Mahallat, Iran and the wider word when he was born? Describe the family circumstances that he was born into - it was an important family in the region at that time.
  • Added information about the context of his family - Erdling 08:45, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
  • Describe the ancestry of both his parents (if you can find the information). His father traced his lineage back to the Prophet Muhammad, while his mother came from a royal Persian lineage.
  • Added information about the ancestry of his parents - Erdling 08:45, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
Activities After Succession to the Imamat
  • Consider renaming this section to be more generic - perhaps The Ismaili Imamat
  • Good suggestion...done! - Erdling 08:45, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
  • Broaden the scope of this section to describe his work on behalf of the Ismaili Imamat both during and prior to his accession to the Imamat.
  • Added more detail about his work - Erdling 08:45, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
  • What was the impact of the Imamat on the Ismaili community and wider society during his lifetime?
  • Added a bit more information about the impact of his work - Erdling 08:45, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
Ni‘mat Allāhīs
  • The Ni‘mat Allāhīs are only one community with whom Aqa Ali Shah had relations. Consider renaming and broadening this section.
  • Good suggestion...done! - Erdling 08:45, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
  • Add more context around the Ni‘mat Allāhīs - their common heritage and long standing relations with Aqa Ali Shah's family would be interesting to point out.
  • Good suggestion....added a bit more information about context - Erdling 08:45, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
Marriages and Children
  • Shams al-Muluk, was a Persian princess - there ought to be an interesting story here...
  • Added a bit more information about her - Erdling 08:45, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
Passing Away and Succession
  • What was Aqa Ali Shah's legacy and how is he remembered?
  • Added a bit of information about how he is remembered - Erdling 09:36, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
  • This section could tie together the impact described in the previous sections.
  • Added a few details to tie the section to previous ones - Erdling 09:36, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
  • Apparently he has a mausoleum in Najaf - perhaps there is info on this?
  • Added a bit more information about the mausoleum - Erdling 08:45, 11 May 2007 (UTC)
  • Consider moving the sportsman info to another section about personal hobbies and character (hopefully there is enough information on this...)
  • Good suggestion....done! - Erdling 08:45, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

Hope that this is helpful! Cimm[talk] 18:45, 9 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for all of your suggestions....they were very helpful indeed! :) - Erdling 08:45, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

conflict with Aga Khan III bio

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In Aga Khan III Muhammad Shah's mother is described as the second wife of Aga Khan II, not the third. I don't know which one is right. Jvv62 16:26, 18 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for pointing this out Jvv62. The Aga Khan III article has been corrected. Multiple credible sources agree that his mother was the third wife of Aga Khan II. Cimm[talk] 19:24, 30 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

WikiProject class rating

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This article was automatically assessed because at least one WikiProject had rated the article as stub, and the rating on other projects was brought up to Stub class. BetacommandBot 17:12, 9 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Raised from stub to B-class. See Talk:Aga Khan II/Comments for details. Cimm[talk] 17:26, 28 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

First two sons

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The marriages and children section seems to contradict itself. We are told that the Aga Khan's first two sons died as adults but later that they both died in infancy. Which is correct, or have I misread the section? Tigerboy1966  21:05, 29 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Assessment comment

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The comment(s) below were originally left at Talk:Aga Khan II/Comments, and are posted here for posterity. Following several discussions in past years, these subpages are now deprecated. The comments may be irrelevant or outdated; if so, please feel free to remove this section.

== B-class == This article exceeded Stub-class a long time ago. Changed rating to B-class, but I think it qualifies for an even higher rating. Cimm[talk] 17:23, 28 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Last edited at 17:23, 28 November 2007 (UTC). Substituted at 06:49, 29 April 2016 (UTC)