Talk:2003 Budweiser Shootout/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 07:32, 10 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I will use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:18, 21 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Immediate Failures

It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria - Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
It contains copyright infringements - there's one on Copyvio detector, but I don't think so. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}). - Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. - Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Links

checklinks is happy Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:50, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
No dablinks/ Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Prose

Lede

Geoff Bodine won the pole position through a lot, - what does this mean? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:55, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- This is a formal name to say that Bodine won the poie position via a draw. MWright96 (talk) 18:42, 16 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
rest is fine Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 15:55, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Background

The image isn't of the track, it should be listed in the caption that it's a artists version Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:00, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Corrected. MWright96 (talk) 18:42, 16 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Captions on images should be full sentences Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:00, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Corrected. MWright96 (talk) 18:42, 16 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
one of six superspeedways to hold NASCAR races; the others are - not sure on the word "are", suggests these races are on-going. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:00, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes, that is still the case. MWright96 (talk) 18:42, 16 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
wikilink/explain "banked". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 16:00, 12 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Wikilinked banked to Banked turn. MWright96 (talk) 18:42, 16 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Practice and qualification

Sorry for the delay on this one - Had my hands full with an FA. back now:
For qualifying, the nineteen drivers that appeared to race chose - I prefer "nineteen participants", less confusing. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Done MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
pole position and Kurt Busch are both linked twice. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Rectified. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
The qualifying is quite long just to say where the top ten finished. I'd stick with a top 5, considering it was a lot. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Not too sure about this query since there are less than 20 participants in the race. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Race

Eastern Standard Time (UTC−05:00) - Don't need to say both of these things. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- MOS:TIMEZONE states that this is an acceptable method of writing. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
was televised live - broadcast live
- Done MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
commanded the drivers to start their engines - "commanded" is quite a strong word. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- I think that is acceptable and it is tradition to start the race via this method in NASCAR racing. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
On lap three, Geoff Bodine felt one of his tires rubbing on his car's bodywork, and he drove his car into the garage.[2] It was discovered that his suspension was damaged and he was confirmed as the race's only retirement on the fourth lap. - lap three or four? Did he notice it on 3 and pit on lap 4? Or, did he go back out and come back in? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Clarified. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
The whole thing about the 10-minute pit stop needs explaining to me. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Clarified. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Newman clung onto Earnhardt's rear bumper panel - not literally, surely? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:01, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes, this is a technique called bump drafting as to maintain momentum. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
attempted to go two abreast behind him - did they go two abreast? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:12, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Corrected. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Post-race comments

Could this be changed to something like "press comments?" Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:12, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed it to "After the race". MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
The Semi-colon in the first sentence isn't right, neither part is required for the other. I'd just change to "The win earned Earnhardt $205,000 and celebrated by performing donuts in the infield grass in front of a crowd of 75,000 people."Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:12, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Done MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Rest is good. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:12, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Notes & References

GA Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments

Automated note - If you fancy returning the favour, I have outstanding GA nominations that require reviewing at WP:GAN. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these, however it's definately not manditory. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 07:17, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- Hi MWright96, pretty close here, just a few comments above. Sorry for the delay. I'd also mention that the table isn't effected by WP:DUPLINK, so you can link every instance of a team/driver being mentioned. I won't place this on hold, as it's pretty close. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 08:14, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  - @Lee Vilenski: Many thanks for reviewing another article of mine that I have significantly expanded. All of the queries raised above and have said where I have not and provided a reason for why. MWright96 (talk) 12:10, 29 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]