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  • If someone wants to add it I won't object, but I find it's more often than not done poorly. Nikkimaria (talk)
  • There are an awful lot of acronyms introduced parenthetically and never used again. Do they help the reader?
  • "longitudinal": might be overlinking
  • Winnipeg is the seventh-largest municipality in Canada: probably want an "as of" for that
  • the Winnipeg Blue Bombers (football): should specify Canadian football. Otherwise, readers will assume it's ... soccer.
  • a location currently known as "The Forks": has it been known as "The Forks" for long? If it's not a recent name, I'd drop "currently". Also, is this different from The Forks, Winnipeg?
  • a transcription of the western Cree word wi-nipe-k meaning: that should be Western Cree, and the link should be to Cree language
  • engaging in farming activity along the Red River. The practice of gardening quickly caught on: are "farming" and "gardening" referring to the same thing here?
  • hunted, traded, and lived in the area: I'd drop "lived"—I think it it's implied.
  • Disagree on this point - hunters and traders could range over a very wide area, but they did not live on all of that land. Nikkimaria (talk)
  • Several different issues, which is why I thought to leave that to that specific article rather than explaining here. Nikkimaria (talk)
  • Winnipeg was the site: except that it wasn't called "Winnipeg" yet.
  • Manitoba and Northwest Territories legislator James McKay named the city.: Is there a story behind the naming? Did McKay speak Cree?
  • The railway divided the North End, which housed mainly Eastern Europeans, from the richer Anglo-Saxon southern part of the city.: Was this intentional?
  • I would say yes, but I don't recall seeing that explicitly stated in any source. Nikkimaria (talk)
  • the increase in shipping traffic helped Vancouver to surpass Winnipeg in both prosperity and population.: By when had that happened?
  • in May 1919 in what came to be known as the Winnipeg General Strike of 1919: is it also known simply as the "Winnipeg Genereal Strike"? It'd be nice to drop that second "1919".
  • returning discharged soldiers seeking work: It may not be obvious why there were so many discharged soldiers.
  • the largest flood to hit Winnipeg since 1861: maybe "to hit the area" or something, as the settlement wasn't yet called Winnipeg in 1861?
  • This evacuation was Canada's largest ever.: As of 1950, or as of 2014?
  • in Western Canada: "Western" from a Canadian geopolitical perspective, but we were told above it was smack in the longitudinal centre. Maybe this should be explained.
  • "largest remaining mature urban elm forest in North America": is there some reason this is quoted?
  • The Red River reached its greatest flood height in 1826.: how high?
  • Exact height unknown, estimates vary...I've created a short article on the topic to mirror the other floods. Nikkimaria (talk)
  • thousands of evacuations: above we were told "100,000", which is certainly "thousands" but not likely what readers would imagine
  • As Duff Roblin wasn't premier until 1958, mabe we should be given a timescale for the Red River Floodway project?
  • such as Grand Forks, North Dakota: Was Grand Forks hit in the same flood?
  • spring and autumn are pleasant: I'm sure they are, but what does "pleasant" mean?
  • Snow sometimes lasts 6 months of the year: meaning it statys on the ground for six months without melting, or the snowing season lasts six months?
  • one square mile (2.5 km2): you use a {{convert}} earlier; not that it matters, but consistency is nice.
  • (irrelevant comment: I had a Chinese friend from Winnipeg who said he and his family were the only Chinese people he knew there—how did he not know about Chinatown, Winnipeg?)
  • Winnipeg census metropolitan area redirects to Winnipeg Capital Region, where it's not capitalized. I have no idea which is correct or if there's anything to do about them.
  • significant Aboriginal population,: are "Aboriginal" and "First Nations" being used as synonyms? Either way, maybe it should be made clear.
  • although Toronto has more Filipinos by total population: I don't see this data in the source; the question I was hoping to answer was whether Toronto was the only municipality with a larger population of Filipinos.
  • NHS profile for Toronto - they have a greater number but it represents a smaller proportion of their population. I actually went through and compared all of the NHS profiles for major cities, so rather than linking all of them in the ref I just went with the "compared to similar profiles" verbiage. Nikkimaria (talk)
  • Any history on the decline of French in Winnipeg? We know there were an awful lot of them in Louis Riel's time.
  • traditional (aboriginal) spirituality: is there anything good to link to here?
  • with a consumer price index of 123.1 as of January 2014: this number doesn't mean anything without a base year.
  • the Canadian Museum for Human Rights (scheduled to open in 2014): worth a redlink? Also, since it's 2014 already, can we get a month or quarter? (yes, it's given below, but still ...)
  • the Millennium Library: is there something that makes the Millennium Library noteworthy?
  • Winnipeg has been home to a number of professional baseball teams, most recently the Winnipeg Goldeyes, since 1994.: "since 1994" refers to being a home to pro baseball teams, or to the Goldeyes?
  • with 300,000+ annual fan visits; consider "more than" to the "+" shorthand?
  • as well as regional and national magazines based in the city: don't want to name any of them?
  • with four hours of broadcasting: per day?
  • There are presently five: A lot of people insist "presently" means "soon"; it may be a target for "corrections".
  • Since 1992, the city of Winnipeg has been represented by 15 city councillors and a mayor elected every four years.: are the councillors elected every four years as well?
  • The present mayor, Sam Katz, was elected to office in 2004 and re-elected in 2006 and 2010: Was one of those a by-election?
  • 25 Winnipeg districts are represented by members of the New Democratic Party (NDP), 4 by members of the Progressive Conservative Party, one by the Liberal Party, and one by an Independent.; In federal politics, Winnipeg is represented by eight Members of Parliament: six Conservatives, one New Democrat and one Liberal.: as of?
  • direct U.S. connections ... and US 75: you use "U.S.", and then "US", even though the link in th esecond one is to "U.S. Route 75"
  • the busiest Canada – United States border crossing between Vancouver and the Great Lakes.: I'm pretty sure you can't cross from the Great Lakes to Vancouver
  • with at-grade intersections: what's an "at-grade intersection"?
  • Still in its preliminary stages, construction has begun on a $212-million four-lane freeway that will connect CentrePort with the Perimeter Highway.: as of?
  • 2009, website still says to be finished by 2013 but they're nowhere close. Nikkimaria (talk)

———Curly Turkey ⚞¡gobble!⚟ 01:55, 26 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hey Curly Turkey, thanks for your comments and edits. I've replied to several inline above; those without comments should be addressed. Nikkimaria (talk) 04:02, 26 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
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