Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Frank Borman/archive1

TFA blurb review

Frank Borman (born March 14, 1928) is a retired United States Air Force colonel, aeronautical engineer, test pilot, and businessman, and the oldest living former NASA astronaut. In 1968, he was the commander of Apollo 8, the first crewed mission to fly around the Moon, for which he was awarded the Congressional Space Medal of Honor. A graduate of West Point, he served as an Air Force fighter pilot and flight instructor, and an assistant professor at West Point. He was one of five students in the first class at the Aerospace Research Pilot School, and was selected as a NASA astronaut with the second group in 1962. He set a fourteen-day spaceflight endurance record as commander of Gemini 7, and served on the review board for the Apollo 1 fire. He became a senior vice president at Eastern Air Lines in 1970, and later its chief executive officer and chairman of the board, leading the company through its four most profitable years before resigning in 1986. He currently owns a ranch in Montana. (Full article...)

Just a suggested blurb ... thoughts and edits are welcome. - Dank (push to talk) 18:07, 3 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Had some space (no pun intended), so added his being a graduate of West Point, and the oldest living ex-astronaut. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:54, 3 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Requested 51st anniversary date --- Coffeeandcrumbs 19:01, 3 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I added 'crewed', since other uncrewed missions flew around the Moon before them (even organisms! see Zond 5). Kees08 (Talk) 20:26, 3 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, but we're up to 1041 characters now ... max is 1025. "a senior vice president", without "for operations", is one idea. - Dank (push to talk) 20:40, 3 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

How about trimming the West Point bit like I just did? Also incorporated your suggestion. Should be under now, with the same meaning we had before, just more concise. Kees08 (Talk) 22:35, 3 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Now 992 characters (including spaces) by my count. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 23:36, 3 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

1010, including "Full article". - Dank (push to talk) 00:14, 4 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Moving this to WP:TFAR. --- Coffeeandcrumbs 03:32, 4 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]