Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/Doctor Neo Cortex

Doctor Neo Cortex

I've made a lot of contributions to the page, and I now believe the article is too well-written to be a Start-Class article. It has more outside references than usual, it covers the character's traits decently enough, and it has a pretty good, clean layout. If you have the time, can you please review the article? Thank you. Cat's Tuxedo 15:56, 9 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Clyde

Good work so far, but let me give you a few pointers: According to the article guidelines of VG, "detailed description of how to play it or an excessive amount of non-encyclopedic trivia." is not accepted, and "A general rule of thumb to follow if unsure: if the content only has value to people actually playing the game, it's unsuitable."

The article is completely missing a conception section. For an example of relative size, look at Link (The Legend of Zelda)
Lead is good size, but missing anything about conception
Music seems to be all original research. Having the download for the song and writing your own anylasis is not correct citing.
How does the picture in music help explain the text?

This stuff is all reference related. Look out for original research and make sure to cite anything that might be challenged. Here is a couple examples, but not all of them.

"Cortex's name is a reference to the brain region neocortex, referring to Neo's high intelligence."
"Interestingly, Doctor Cortex is never referred to as simply Neo throughout the entire series, perhaps (especially after the 1999 release of The Matrix) to avoid confusion with the film character Neo of the Matrix series." The second part of it is someone's point of view, speculation, and original research.
Cortex can become quite irritated or agitated when things don't go his way, especially in Crash Tag Team Racing..."
"which according to the official Crash Bandicoot website and Wrath of Cortex official strategy guide, stands for "Nerd""
"who gives the character a smoother, deeper, and overall more menacing feel than the first game."
"To this day, Cortex's age is uncertain, but his appearance suggests that he is in his early fifties or mid-sixties."

Other things:

The first picture of him has an IGN mark. This is in copyright violation and must be replaced with a different image.
The rest of the images need fair use rationales.
A picture of the cortex glider would be good.
Try and make the bulleted list full fledged prose.
For instruction manuals, try to add publishers and dates if possible.
For website sources, try to flesh out the cite web with dates, authors, and publishers.

Good luck.--Clyde (talk) 00:18, 18 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]