Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Operation Barrel Roll

Am rounding out work on this stub. Am looking for some constructive criticism. RM Gillespie 00:02, 27 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Very nice work, as usual. A few general suggestions, in no particular order:

Wording such as "After a series of political and military machinations conducted by the U.S., the Pathet Lao, and the DRV in Laos that are best described elsewhere..." may be appropriate in a book, but is out of place in an encyclopedia article; it's not at all clear what "elsewhere" refers to, and the overall structure is too self-referential, resembling the oft-decried "This article will...".
Extended quotes (e.g. "Since the fate of Laos...") should ideally be introduced rather than merely included, with the source given directly in the text.
Month/day combinations need to be linked to allow date preferences to work correctly.
Is there any particular reason why PAVN unit names are given in italics? I was under the impression that only the untranslated portions of foreign unit names are typically typeset in that form.

Thanks Kirill. The italics follow the U.S. Army's format, which distinguishes enemy from friendly units. Since I do not believe that any RLG forces are directly mentioned by name, only U.S. Air Force ones, should the italics be removed? Just did it out of habit. RM Gillespie 00:05, 28 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Yep, I'd remove them; given that the article is not meant to be explicitly tied to the perspective of one of the combatants, the friendly/enemy distinction wouldn't really make sense here, in any case. Kirill Lokshin 00:09, 28 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Took care of everything except linking the dates. Could you give me an example? RM Gillespie 01:26, 28 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]