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Raised this one up from a starter and it balooned into a monster. I realize that it should be broken into constituent pieces, but the pertinent sub-articles are pretty abysmal. Still hammering at it, but would like some constructive criticism. RM Gillespie 01:33, 2 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Kirill Lokshin

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It's a bit on the long side, but it's not necessarily too long at this point; if you're planning on adding more material, of course, then moving some things out into real sub-articles will probably be needed. Aside from that, a few thoughts:

  • The source for quotes ought to be introduced in-text in addition to being given in the footnotes, as it's otherwise difficult for a reader to follow where the material is coming from; this is present in most cases, but there are some which are missing it (e.g. "Almost gone was the hope...").
  • It may be valuable to create some articles—even if only stubs—on the major PAVN and ARVN formations that are discussed here.
  • I would try to vary the usage of "PAVN" and "ARVN" with "North Vietnamese" and "South Vietnamese" a bit; some parts of the article are quite acronym-heavy.

Overall, though, this is an excellent article, quite up to your usual standards. Keep up the great work! Kirill 01:42, 5 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

    • Thanks Kirill. I think its about as big as it is going to get (thank God!) Have followed your prescriptions on quotes and acronyms. Getting ready to do some stubs (mostly North Vietnamese commands). RM Gillespie 02:42, 5 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]