Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Battle of Alton
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Hello. I just started Battle of Alton and I'd like to bring it to FA status eventually. I'm not used to writing articles on military history, so any help would be greatly appreciated. I think the weakest area is the lack of illustration: I'm currently waiting on the possible relicensing of some great maps of the area, but the owner seems reluctant. Also, any suggestions as to additional sources would be welcomed.-- Rmrfstar (talk) 21:57, 5 September 2010 (UTC)
- You need to go through and look at your wikilinks. I've fixed one or two but you need to check each one before you go for FA for disambiguation. For example, one I didn't have time to fix is drakes, which you intend as light artillery pieces but leads to an American bakery.Monstrelet (talk) 06:52, 6 September 2010 (UTC)
- Right. I just reviewed every link in the article. -- Rmrfstar (talk) 16:41, 6 September 2010 (UTC)
AustralianRupert
[edit]Just a few minor points from me:
- OCLC numbers might be added to the works in the Bibliography that are too old for ISBNs, they can be found by searching at [1];
- Done.
- some of the citations are to pretty broad page ranges, I think at FAC they might ask you to be more specific with the pages from where the information came;
- I've improved that a bit.
- some of the citation numbers are not listed consecutively, for instance in the Battle section, "...scaffolding inside the church proper.[6][5]" I think at FAC they link the citations to appear consecutively, e.g. [5][6];
- Done.
- in the prose you have "500+" and "100+", I think you should replace these with prose. For instance you might say "More than 500 men were captured..." and "...in addition to the estimated 100 men of Boles' force that were killed...";
- Done.
- if it hasn't already been through a copy edit, I suggest having this done prior to nominating it for FA status. There no major glaring issues that I can see, but it always pays to have it done in the long run. The Guild of Copy Editors accept requests, I believe. AustralianRupert (talk) 09:54, 7 September 2010 (UTC)
- Got it. Thanks for the review! -- Rmrfstar (talk) 16:30, 7 September 2010 (UTC)
Cryptic C62
[edit]Resolved issues
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More to come. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 15:38, 7 September 2010 (UTC) |
- I can't wait! -- Rmrfstar (talk) 02:51, 10 September 2010 (UTC)
- Those are my final comments. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 18:16, 13 September 2010 (UTC)
- Great. Thanks, again. -- Rmrfstar (talk) 20:04, 13 September 2010 (UTC)
- Those are my final comments. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 18:16, 13 September 2010 (UTC)
You get has:
--Cryptic C62 · Talk 00:30, 14 September 2010 (UTC)
Jim Sweeney
[edit]- The notes all need references
- Done.
- References should come after punctuation couple in the lede at least that do not.
- Done.
- In the background section King Charles should be linked.
- Done.
- Whats the difference between the but only around 2000 conscripted infantry and 500 troops ? should they be troops ? if not 16 troops of horse later on should be linked.
- The 500 were from Munster. I'm not sure I understand the confusion.
- So was there 2,500 infantry? whats the difference between the two. Were the 500 volunteers or something else.
- There were 2,500 infantry in total: 2000 were conscripted; 500 had already fought in Ireland.
- So was there 2,500 infantry? whats the difference between the two. Were the 500 volunteers or something else.
- The 500 were from Munster. I'm not sure I understand the confusion.
- There is a mixture of dates both the 3 November and on the 27th used. I would suggest using 3 November and 27 November.
- Done.
- Lord Crawford sent a missive to Farnham - whats a missive ?
- Pretty much a letter. It's a more general term, however, and more appropriate here.
- Its linked to Letter (message)
- That's fine.
- Its linked to Letter (message)
- Pretty much a letter. It's a more general term, however, and more appropriate here.
- The march was quick and quiet, owing to the long frost which improved the roadways. If thats what the source says ok, but it did take 14 hours so the quick part is dubious.
- Multiple sources say the frost made the march quick. They travelled at least 15 miles as the crow flies (because of their detour), and they took a break. That sounds like a reasonable speed to me.
- Some book in the bibliography are missing publishing locations. --Jim Sweeney (talk) 11:31, 8 September 2010 (UTC)
- All done! Thanks for the review. -- Rmrfstar (talk) 19:45, 8 September 2010 (UTC)