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Werner Mölders

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Promoted --Eurocopter (talk) 14:20, 18 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Nominator(s): MisterBee1966 (talk)
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I am nominating this article for A-Class review because it received a major overhaul and all major points of criticism from the peer review and GA-review have been addressed. MisterBee1966 (talk) 16:34, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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    • If you are going to link to flying ace the you do not need to provide a definition for the term, readers can simply follow the link to learn more about what an ace is. Therefore, I recommend losing the definition in the second sentence of the first paragraph.
Comment That is interesting! At the FA-Class review of Heinrich Bär a definition of the term "flying ace" at the article level was required by the reviewers. I have no personal issue with taking this out but I want to leave it here until maybe more reviewers have commented on the issue. MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:00, 1 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    • In the first paragraph of the "early life" section you have the following sentence: "At school he detected his love for water sports, especially rowing." May a suggest rewording to "At school he discovered his love for water sports, especially rowing." IMHO, it sounds better and improves the flow of the article.
done MisterBee1966 (talk) 08:00, 1 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Conditional Support
  • "Sustaining three splinter wounds in the lower leg, one in the knee and one in the left foot." Fragment.
  • "successor became Oberleutnant Georg Claus." Awkward.
  • There are some other awkward bits, I would recommend a copy-edit before FAC.
  • Watch linking - some terms are linked many times close together.
  • "He claimed his first aerial victory after the lengthy vacation on 26 February 1941, the 60th aerial victory was claimed on 26 February and his tally stood at 68" Awkward, rephrase please.
  • "His log-book showed 238 combat missions plus a further 71 reconnaissance flights and had engaged in aerial combat 70 times." Again, awkward.
The main issue I saw was that the text reads awkwardly and could use a copy-edit to fix this. I may be gone for a while, so if this is done by someone I can be counted in support. – Joe N 19:31, 2 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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