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SMS Nymphe (1863)

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And now for something (sort of) completely different - to give you a break from all of that steel, here's a bit of wood and sail. This ship saw service during the wars of German unification, including the Battle of Jasmund in 1864, and was later used to protect German interests in Asia and finally as a training vessel. Thanks to all who take the time to review the article. Parsecboy (talk) 12:56, 7 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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I'll do this one tomorrow. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 19:49, 8 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

  • a blockade of the Baltic and North Sea ports of Prussia Maybe link Prussia?
    • Added a link, but earlier
  • island of Rügen; off the Jasmund peninsula Capitalise "peninsula".
    • Done
  • May I ask you did Prussia uses metric units? Because the article uses primary metric but this sentence after Sjælland closed to 1,600 yards (1,500 m) uses US/imperial units as primary units.
    • Good catch, flipped the units
  • Nymphe took the 15 cm gun from Delphin No US/imperial units?
    • Added
  • French merchant shipping in the Atlantic Ocean Unlink Atlantic Ocean.
    • Done
  • She reached Rio de Janeiro, Brazil on 14 October, where she stayed for two weeks Unlink Rio de Janeiro?
    • Done
  • After crossing the Indian Ocean Unlink Indian Ocean.
    • Done
  • then sailed north into Oceania Unlink Oceania.
    • This I'd prefer to keep linked - it's not a common term
  • I only ask to unlink those names if I remember them as a child. Then I am sure it needs to be unlinked. However this one is more a linguistic issue, as a Dutch speaker you'd say Oceania and not Australia as a primary name to the region. While English speakers do uses more Australia than Oceania. If one of my comments are again little linguistic issues then feel free to say that. Cheers.
  • the ship traveled overland to Bangkok, Siam Unlink Bangkok and link Siam.
    • Done
  • she crossed the Pacific to San Francisco, United States Unlink San Francisco?
    • Done
  • and on the way she stopped in Lisbon Add Portugal after Lisbon.
    • Done

That's anything from me. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 20:04, 9 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for another review! Parsecboy (talk) 11:46, 10 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

CommentsSupport by PM

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This article is in fine shape. I have a few comments:

  • suggest making "She had one sister ship, Medusa, and the vessels were wooden-hulled ships armed with a battery of sixteen guns." the second sentence of the lead
    • Works for me
  • also in the lead, "in the process of being recalled to Germany" begs the question of where she was. Suggest adding "from the Mediterranean Sea"
    • Good idea
  • also in the lead, suggest "on the armored vesselsFrench ships" to avoid repetition
    • Good ieda
  • also in the lead, suggest "she touredvisited numerous citiesports"
    • Done
  • suggest "sufficient experience to operate the steam machinery"
    • A much better version - thanks
  • link ship commissioning
    • Done
  • "had arrived off Swinemünde"
    • Fixed
  • per MOS:TIME, 7:30 needs a leading zero
    • Fixed
  • suggest "the range grew too farlong"
    • Done
  • suggest "she was nevertheless never in serious danger
    • Done
  • suggest mentioning that Geestemünde was a new naval depot when it is first mentioned, and link Geestemünde
    • Good catch
  • suggest "On 21 July, she was assigned to the defenses of Neufahrwasser that protected Danzig."
    • Good idea
  • "he sortied and began"
    • Fixed
  • same time issue with 1:15 and 3:00
    • Fixed
  • the lead mentions lack of damage to the French ironclads but there is no mention in the body
    • Fixed

More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:23, 12 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

  • "where she helped to settle disputes" do you mean Blanc here? I assume he was the one doing the talking, or was it just the presence of the ship that smoothed things over?
    • Clarified
  • suggest "but theseit too lacked a usable harbor"
    • Done
  • the sources all appear of high quality and reliable.

That's me done. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:31, 12 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks again PM. Parsecboy (talk) 13:12, 13 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
No prob. Supporting. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:03, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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  • Cite 10: "p." -> 'pp.'
    • Fixed
  • Embree: insert ISBN hyphens.
    • Done
  • Is there a reason why Hildebrand has an abbreviated title?
    • Not particularly, though I don't know that including the subtitle is necessary (for the purposes of identifying the book for readers).

Gog the Mild (talk) 17:28, 3 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Gog. Parsecboy (talk) 22:14, 9 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments by Sturmvogel_66

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  • No DABs
  • Smoothbore or rifled guns?
    • Clarified
  • Spell out 2-bladed
    • Done
  • Add her rig to the infobox
    • Good idea
  • Suggest linking tons of all types
    • Done
  • Add that Penn & Sons was a British company
    • Good idea
  • It would be helpful to know the strength of Dockum's squadron
    • Done
  • Link British royal family, Rio de Janeiro, Brazil, San Francisco, overhaul
    • Linked the royals and overhaul, but I think CPA asked me to unlink the others above - you'll have to fight him over it ;)
  • A few niggles, but nicely done.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:17, 6 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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