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Nominator(s): MisterBee1966 (talk)


I am nominating this article for A-Class review because I think it meets the criteria. Enjoy the read and let me know what I missed. Thanks once more. MisterBee1966 (talk) 11:10, 11 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments: I did some copy editing. Please check that you are happy with my changes. I had a little trouble understanding everything (not my area of expertise, sorry), so I may have missed some things. As such, it might pay to ask someone else to take a look from a copy editor's perspective. Anyway, I have the following comments: AustralianRupert (talk) 12:04, 5 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

CommentsSupport by Peacemaker67 (send... over) 10:49, 12 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Please note that I will be out for a few days. MisterBee1966 (talk) 06:31, 23 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments

Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. - Dank (push to talk)

  • Spick is listed in the citations but not in the bibliography. I'd recommend removing the second sentence (defining "ace") in the lead and going with: "... was a German Luftwaffe fighter ace during World War II, credited with 206 ...". Definitions in the first paragraph are usually a bad idea. I have no problem with putting the definition somewhere below the lead.
  • "born on 17 March 1917 at 22:45": I don't remember seeing time of birth in a WP biography before; is it relevant?
  • " physically examination": physical examination
  • "and or radio operator": or radio operator - Dank (push to talk) 02:37, 10 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.