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Promoted Peacemaker67 (send... over) 09:49, 15 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Nominator(s): Hawkeye7 (talk)

Presenting George Kistiakowsky, inventor of the edible explosive. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:24, 20 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Support -- as ever, let me know if I misunderstood anything when I copyedited...

  • Structure/prose/content-wise, the only outstanding query I have is re. "Kistiakowsky was unhappy with the state of American knowledge of explosives and propellants. To remedy this, Conant established the Explosives Research Laboratory..." -- does this mean Kistiakowsky convinced Conant of the deficiency, and if so can we mention/cite that explicitly?
  • Image licensing looks good to me.
  • Sources look reliable and I couldn't see any obvious formatting problems.

Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 05:41, 3 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

  • Addressing the issues about the EBL: Dainton says: [Kistiakowsky] found that U.S. research in explosives and propellants was seriously deficient and this was reflected in lower quality weaponry. To remedy this he set up a special laboratory adjacent to the laboratories of the U.S. Bureau of Mines at Bruceton, Pennsylvania. (p. 383) But Noyes (written by Kistiakowsky and Connor) says: The Explosives Research Laboratory (ERL) originated with the decision of Drs. Conant and Davis, in the summer of 1940, to centralize the testing of explosives in one location and to place it in the hands of a staff which was already familiar with the subject. (p. 26) So I've re-worded to avoid giving this impression. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:48, 12 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Support on prose per standard disclaimer. These are my edits. "Taylor and Kistiakowsky published a series of papers together, Encouraged by Taylor, he published a American Chemical Society monograph on photochemical processes.": Something's wrong, and I'm wondering if that can be tighter. - Dank (push to talk) 03:55, 7 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

A comma where there should be a full stop? Re-worded to: Taylor and Kistiakowsky published a series of papers together. Encouraged by Taylor, Kistiakowsky also published a American Chemical Society monograph on photochemical processes. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:48, 12 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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