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Donald Wilson (general)

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Nominator(s): Hawkeye7 (talk)


An unusual article on an American air general. Like Kenneth Walker, he was a key figure in the doctrine debates of the 1930s. World War II was not kind to these thinkers. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:59, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Can't find a lot of issues with the article, so I'll leave it at that. —Ed!(talk) 18:29, 6 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments Interesting to read of the reasoning behind the US conducting daylight bombing. Not much to nitpick here, but I did make minor tweaks to the text in a few places.

  • "The 5th Maryland Regiment returned to Baltimore in February 1917." There is no mention of the regiment being in Baltimore at all prior to this..
  • "his request was disapproved." Disapproved seems to be an unusual term to use here. Unless it has a specific meaning in military terminology I would suggest replacing with not approved or declined.
  • "The school embraced the doctrine that strategic bombing was the most important aspect of air power, but Wilson rejected those parts of the doctrine of Giulio Douhet that called for mass bombing of cities to break the morale of the enemy". This sentence doesn't flow well, particularly the second part. Perhaps this: The school embraced the doctrine of air power theorist Giulio Douhet, who argued that strategic bombing was the most important aspect of air power. However, Wilson rejected those parts of Douhet's doctrine that called for mass bombing of cities to break the morale of the enemy.
  • Neurasthenia. Should the lower case n be used? Upper case used both in lead and main body of article.

That's it for me. Zawed (talk) 08:45, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. Please check the edit summaries. - Dank (push to talk)

  • "one of the leading theorists...during the thirties": spaces around the ellipsis, and attribute quotes.
  • "railroads, where critical breaks could disrupt the entire system": Is this just saying that trains can't travel on a broken rail line?
    • Yes, that is what a break is. The point is that railroads can re-route to minimise disruption, but in some cases breaks can cause disproportionate disruption. There is a branch of mathematics here, called network topology. I might add that the enormity of the intelligence effort required to identify critical points was not really considered until World War II. Hawkeye7 (talk) 07:10, 15 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Wilson accepted the argument, most forcibly advanced by fellow instructor Kenneth Walker, that fighter aircraft did not have the range or speed to accompany bombers and probably could not shoot them down. Wilson termed this doctrine "industrial web theory".": That doesn't seem like an industrial web theory ... maybe move that bit?
  • Otherwise, So far so good on prose per standard disclaimer, down to where I stopped, about two-thirds of the way, at Donald_Wilson_(general)#World War II. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 04:31, 15 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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