- Lede
- I've never been a fan of "running" as a verb for describing highways. I'd suggest "travelling concurrently" in this case. YMMV in each of the cases that I mention it below.
- Again in the second case, and remove the link to concurrency.
- Route description
- Nitpicky, but "crosses into Calhoun County and over the St. Joseph River." - if the county line is the river, then you should swap the order of these.
- Intersecting M-60?
- "North of I-94, I-69 has one more interchange before crossing into Eaton County" - You mention the road at other interchanges, but not this one.
- "Near Olivet, I-69 begins to turn in a northeasterly direction. As it continues in that direction, it runs to the north side of Olivet." - Reads somewhat awkward, and again with the run bit.
- " I-69 follows the path of a line of the Canadian National Railway" - I'm assuming you mean parallels it?
- "I-69, the railroad and the Swartz Creek all run together" - sounds like a marathon :) There's another "run" shortly after this too.
- "It jogs to the north around Lake Nepessing on the southwest of Lapeer." Reads weird/grammatically incorrect.
- "follow part of the Black River in the area." - "in the area" seems redundant here.
- History
- I believe left aligned photos are supposed to be placed above level 3 headers to align better.
- "The first major overland transportation corridors in the future state of Michigan were the Indian trails.[9] None of these followed the path of the modern I-69 however." - Just curious why you put this here, it seems irrelevant to I-69 in this case.
- Because if I didn't, people will ask for more back history from before the 20th century. In this case, it's somewhat northworthy to have a 2dI that isn't a former Indian trail. Imzadi 1979 → 05:34, 22 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- "By 1936, the highway was extended all the way into Flint to end at M-21." - M-78 or M-104?
- The second paragraph of the Predecessor highways section gets confusing when you introduce M-78 into the picture. It may be prudent to mention as you go along which segments of these would line up with I-69, since Pittsburg, for example, isn't mentioned in the RD.
- In the last paragraph of Interstate Highway era, you mention that BUS I-69 was designated in 1984, congress extended the designation for a final time in 1987 to Port Huron, but the final segment of the route wasn't completed until October 1992. This is rather confusing.
- "...the Michigan Legislature designated that I-69... would be named..." - declared would be more appropriate than designated in this case.
- "The following October" - is that October 2001 (that October) or October 2002 (the following), as I would come to read it?
- Why would it ever be a mistake to head to Canada? ;)
- Exit list
- Business loops
- May want to use a better source than Gmaps for validating that the loops followed those predecessors, as I can only see evidence of the ones in Coldwater and Charlotte being US 27
- Refs
- Ref 2: Scale / "Scale not given" needed
- Do you think it may be better organized to group your refs so that maps can be given their own section? I've thought of doing this on a few articles with over 40-50 refs.
I'll add my history review in the next day or two. - Floydian τ ¢ 04:08, 11 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Or seven. Since you haven't replied yet, I've just inserted the history review above. - Floydian τ ¢ 21:36, 17 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- At this point it's looking to be a support. Just wanted to get your thoughts on the map and the reference reorganization. - Floydian τ ¢ 02:38, 25 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Yeah, not fond of separating the references that way. For shortened refs, I've just mixed them in with the other footnotes, which is what we did with U.S. Route 41 in Michigan several years ago when I started that article. It passed FAC that way in 2009 so there's ample precedent to mixed shortened and unshortened refs together in a single list. As for the map, I just need a few minutes to get it made and it will be added, done similar to the one on the U.S. Route 23 in Michigan article. Imzadi 1979 → 05:07, 25 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
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