Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Paolo Uccello
I have recently given this article an assessment of class B, but I believe that with a peer review and appropriate follow-up, that it is a likely candidate for Good Article status. Thanks, Lini 02:20, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
This is a nice start. The article is particularly well-illustrated which is so important for an artist. Here are my suggestions.
- General comment 1: I might consider dividing his life into subsections: Early life and apprenticeship, Florence, etc.
- General comment 2: I might also consider including a separate section on Paolo Uccello's aesthetic so that you can delve into an analysis of his paintings. You might have a subsection here on his artistic legacy or even make that a separate section altogether.
- General comment 3: You have several one-sentence paragraphs. Can you work them into the narrative or expand them?
- He had some influence on twentieth century art and literary criticism. - what kind of influence? Can you give us a hint in the lead?
- His nickname Uccello came from his fondness for painting birds. - could you simply add "Uccello, which means "bird" in Latin,.."
- His father, Dono di Paolo, was a barber-surgeon from Pratovecchio near Arezzo, his mother’s name was Antonia. - awkwardly worded
- Tell us why it is significant that Paolo was friends with Donatello (alas, not everyone knows who Donatello was).
- Actual quotes from Vasari would add to the article. Ex:
- Vasari writes that people thought this was a great and beautiful achievement.
- His depiction of a fierce lion fighting with a venom-spouting snake was espeically appreciated by Vasari.
- Paolo was asked to paint a number of distempered scenes of animals for the house of the Medici. - I am not sure what you mean by "distempered".
- Should he be referred to as Paolo or Uccello? It seems odd to refer to him as the bird. What do scholarly sources do?
- Uccello was married to Tomassa Malifici by 1453, because in that year Donato (named after Donatello) was born, and in 1456 his wife gave birth to Antonia. - oddly worded
- He painted a predella with the Miracle of the Profaned Host part of a monumental altarpiece. - briefly tell us what a predella is
- With his precise, analytical mind he tried to apply a scientific method to depict objects in three-dimensional space. In particular, some of his studies of the perspective foreshortening of the torus are preserved, and he realised the thus acquired insights in his paintings in form of the mazzocchio. - awkwardly worded
- If you want to go for GA and eventually FA, you will need to have inline citations. WP:CITE I noticed that you used Pope-Hennessy for the list of works (obviously a classic in the field) and have a good list of references. All you need to do is add footnotes in the text to these references.
- I assume that there is no picture of Paolo Uccello to put in the infobox? Awadewit 14:41, 5 March 2007 (UTC)