Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/John Floyd (Virginia politician)
This passed GA and am hoping to get feedback to see what it needs to FA, thanks! --plange 05:30, 4 October 2006 (UTC)
A very nice article (as usual!). I think it can go through FA proceedure. Some minor remarks which are not definitely right:
- "Though counseling prudence and moderation in his annual message of December, 1832, Floyd was then secretly counting the costs and horrors of war. To his mind that 'outrage upon our institutions,' that 'satire upon the revolution,' and that 'consummation of a long expected executive usurpation,' Jackson's Proclamation, in answer to the Nullification Ordinance of South Carolina, made war inevitable." I'm puzzled with all these quotation marks. Is this said by somebody? If yes by whom? And what is exactly the meaning?!
- "As a result, he turned to Clay, and attempted to bring him and John C. Calhoun together in a new political party to support these views.[2][57][58]" Usually, I'm Ok with two inline citations in a row. But three ... I donot know.
- I'm a bit worried with these loooong quotations within the prose. My opinion is that they interrupt a bit the flow. You might get criticized in FAC.
- "Catholicism, death and legacy". This section does not say much about his legacy - just a small sentence. I know I proposed such a section, but if you can't find anything, it is Ok! But then I think a title like "Catholicism and death" is better.
In general, the article is informative and well-citated. 4 sources is not magnificent, but also not terrible. So I think it can be a FA.--Yannismarou 20:27, 5 October 2006 (UTC)
- Thanks!
- On first one: You're right, that wasn't done too well :-) The biographer was actually quoting Floyd, so I restructured it to make that clearer. Does it work now?
- Yea! It is crystall clear now!--Yannismarou 06:54, 6 October 2006 (UTC)
- Fixed 3 quote pileup
- Fixed section
- Will work on long quotes