Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/George Platt Brett, Sr.

I hope to get a peer reivew and make this a good article It is me i think (talk) 13:49, 13 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

It reads like a list. I would prefer it to be written as prose, i.e. the very short sections and paragraphs should be merged.
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Needs a lot of work.

For the lead, read WP:LEAD and act accordingly.
"Early Career" is listy. Make your article tell a nice story. And avoid stubby paragraphs.
What is this ling quote in "Established control of Macmillan in America". Turn it into proper encyclopedic prose of yours.
"Testimony before the United States Congress" is stubby.
"Publisher of American Authors" reads like trivia.
"Personal life" needs expansion or merging with another section.
Format properly your online sources using Template:cite web or Template:cite news.
Format properly your sources in Bibliography using the aforementioned templates, and Template:cite book or Template:cite journal or Template:cite encyclopedia.
The same with Additional Resources, which IMO should be renamed "Further Reading".
Do not put in "See also" articles already linked in the main text.

After the article gets improved, a new peer-review will be needed.--Yannismarou (talk) 12:49, 22 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]