Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Dirk Nowitzki

Dirk Nowitzki

Recently, I rewrote the Dirk Nowitzki article from scratch, centering around the biography of this NBA basketball player. Chensiyuan helped me with his copyedits. I want to make it a FA in the future, and hope to find a fertile source of constructive criticism here. —Onomatopoeia (talk) 11:59, 11 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

To be precise I didn't copyedit all that much, just did some minor cleaning up (formatting, refs, wc, etc.) and wikilinked where appropriate. An experienced copyeditor would be appreciated here. Chensiyuan (talk) 15:31, 11 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.^[?]
Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.^[?]
Per Wikipedia:What is a featured article?, Images should have concise captions.^[?]
This article may need to undergo summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is United States, then an appropriate subpage would be History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.^[?]
Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.^[?]

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. —Onomatopoeia (talk) 10:03, 7 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Yannismarou

"Regarded as one of the best European players in basketball history". By whom exactly? Cite or this is POV.
"he stated that "Dirk Nowitzki is the greatest German basketball talent of the last 10, maybe 15 years". Always cite quotes. The same here "Nowitzki said: "I was so frustrated I even contemplated going back to Germany… [the jump from Second Bundesliga to the NBA] was like jumping out of an airplane hoping the parachute would somehow open.""
"In addition, his best friend Nash became a valuable point guard, and with Finley scoring more than ever, pundits were calling this trio the "Big Three" of the Mavericks." What pundits? Cite.
I am not sure if the "NBA career statistics" are well-placed there. In most articles, statistics go after the end of the whole main text. But I suppose this is not the strictest rule in the world!
"Nowitzki was born into an athletic family. Both his mother Helga and his father Jörg-Werner were professional handball players who represented Germany in international games." I read exactly the same sentence in the beginning of the article!

Very nice article, and I liked a lot the prose (although I got a bit tired and bored in "Mark Cuban and the "Big Three" (1999–2004)" reading about one play-off game after the other!), which is something I don't often say about athletes' bios!--Yannismarou (talk) 17:47, 18 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the feedback, it is appreciated and will be incorporated into the article. —Onomatopoeia (talk) 10:07, 21 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]