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06:33:44, 20 April 2016 review of submission by Heli Mäenpää

Heli Mäenpää (talk · contribs)
- Draft:Sami Tallberg (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

My (first) article was declined but I made the corrections asked 9 days ago and sent the page for review, still no answer. What should I do now to hear if the article can be published or is declined again... Looking forward to hearing from you.

Heli Mäenpää (talk) 06:33, 20 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Heli Mäenpää, There are still about 25 drafts older than Draft:Sami Tallberg waiting to be reviewed. Probably it will be reviewed within a few days. See Wikipedia:Community portal if you want to reduce one of Wikipedia's many backlogs while you wait. --Worldbruce (talk) 14:29, 20 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

09:38:52, 20 April 2016 review of submission by 194.72.35.13

194.72.35.13 (talk · contribs)

Hello !I am a new user to wikipedia and was wanting to inquire as to why my draft for Aadarsh Mishra was declined. Do I need to give the inline citations for my draft ? How to do that ? Although, I have cited two references - Do I need to cite more ?

Also, the draft is supporting the criterion 3 of Wikipedia:Notability (academics) and the reference was given for the same.

I would like to make the required corrections and then resubmit . Please could you help ? I will be thankful to you for the same ! — Preceding unsigned comment added by 194.72.35.13 (talk) 10:50, 20 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

194.72.35.13 (talk) 09:38, 20 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

10:13:20, 20 April 2016 review of submission by 138.251.14.34

138.251.14.34 (talk · contribs)
- Draft:Webster Siame Kameme (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

I would like to edit this article and resubmit. please advise.

Please do so. The draft cites Wikipedia, but Wikipedia is user-generated, so it is not a reliable source. Instead, consider citing the sources (books, newspapers, etc.) listing in the references sections of those Wikipedia articles, if those sources support the content you want to add. --Worldbruce (talk) 15:03, 20 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

14:29:54, 20 April 2016 review of submission by History 1

History 1 (talk · contribs)
- Draft:Gene Arden Vance Jr. (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

thank you for the help available here. The information contained in my submission uses language sourced directly from US Federal publications, notable public institutions, media sources and organizations. I do understand 333-blue's response and am hopeful that an example, taken from the actual text of my submission, showing how I might present the information in a more formal tone, might be compiled. I would use that example as a guide to my rewriting of the submission in a more encyclopedic format as requested. Many thanks to all in advance for help and guidance.

Hi History 1, I've adjusted the draft's structure slightly to follow the recommended format more closely. Move the content around to fit into the framework. For example: move his awards and decorations down to the "Awards and Decorations" section, and move information about his death and poshumous promotion into the "Death" section.

The lead is not fulfilling its proper purpose. See Wikipedia:Writing better articles and Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lead section for more information. Take every statement currently in the lead and move it to the relevant section of the article. When the lead is blank, fix up each section of the article. Once the body of the article is finalized, go back and write a new lead that summarizes the body. Aim for about three paragraphs.

The "Legacy" (formerly "Memorials") section needs to be tightened up a lot. At present it's considerably longer than the biography itself. Typically such a section is just a few sentences listing things (schools, stretches of highway, buildings) renamed after the subject.

The "Further reading" section also needs to be slashed drastically. The goal is a handful of bullet points, each one a book or article that would give the reader a deeper understanding of Vance than is possible in the Wikipedia article. At present there's a whole other biography crammed in there where it doesn't belong.

You may find it useful to study the following examples of good articles about similar topics:

They don't follow all of Wikipedia's guidelines, but they are much closer to the dry, dispassionate, opinion-free, just-the-facts tone that you should aim for. --Worldbruce (talk) 17:08, 20 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

14:43:30, 20 April 2016 review of draft by Lynnshore

Lynnshore (talk · contribs)
- Draft:Happy 50ish! - The Mid-Life Crisis Musical Comedy (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

I am having trouble formatting the references correctly. I've only tried a couple but don't seem to understand exactly how it works. I need some help, please.

Lynnshore (talk) 14:43, 20 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Lynnshore. You weren't far off. The <ref></ref> tags, counterintuitively, do not go in the references section. That section is built automatically behind the scenes. Instead, place the ref tags immediately after the sentence or paragraph that the source supports. I've done that with the first two references as an example. This is the most bare-bones style of referencing. Help:Referencing for beginners contains a wealth of information on the topic, including how to use citation templates and how to use the same reference more than once. --Worldbruce (talk) 15:38, 20 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lynnshore (talk • contribs) 16:00, 20 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

19:39:09, 20 April 2016 review of submission by Mnlkrz

Mnlkrz (talk · contribs)

Hello, I need help to prove the notability of the source. From a country like Liberia where not much independent information is online available it is hard to find the required information. Any help will be appreciated. Please help to avoid that this contribution will be deleted. Thank you.... Mnlkrz (talk) 19:39, 20 April 2016 (UTC) Mnlkrz (talk) 19:39, 20 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

21:00:15, 20 April 2016 review of submission by 68.2.123.163

68.2.123.163 (talk · contribs)
- Draft:VidAmerica (edit | talk | history | links | watch | logs)

I'm writing this page because I have knowledge about this small, defunct VHS company. But it was rejected back in October because it doesn't have enough sources, even though I found some good sources. So, can anyone please help find more coverage of this company? Thanks! 68.2.123.163 (talk) 21:00, 20 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The Panorama source needs clarification. In which issue can one find this information? To find more sources you might explore Wikipedia:WikiProject Film/Resources or try asking at Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Film.

I've added three more sources to a "further reading" section. The piece in The Wall Street Journal is mostly about Compact Video, but mentions VidAmerica several times. I didn't read it carefully enough to know if it fills in any gaps between the Los Angeles Times articles, or entirely overlaps them. The text is available through ProQuest and probably other major databases. If you don't have access through a library, WP:RX can help you, or use Special:EmailUser to email me and I'll reply with the text of the article. The Evening Tribune article is mostly about something else, but starts with an interesting paragraph about VidAmerica's very early history. It's short enough that I've quoted it in its entirety on the draft. --Worldbruce (talk) 00:16, 21 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the sources, Worldbruce. I've managed to expand VidAmerica's early history on my draft using your first two sources. With the third source, I'm able to view the article "Compact Video Arouses Curiosity as a Vehicle For Moves Within Ronald Perelman's Empire" through a Wall Street Journal archive, but unfortunately, I don't have access to read the complete article. So I emailed you asking for the text of the entire WSJ article. I hope you reply with it to my email. Thanks for the help! 68.2.123.163 (talk) 17:00, 23 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]