Wikipedia:WikiProject Architecture/Peer review/Architecture of Norway
This was put up as a Featured Article candidate, was turned down with a number of specific suggestion improvements, all of which have been met. Would like further feedback from the community to bring it to a point where it can once more be successfully nominated. --Leifern 14:43, 8 November 2006 (UTC)
- Comment Nice images and the general scope of the article seems ok. The english needs a major overhaul though.
- The inline citations need tidying up per WP:MOS - basically the citations should come after the paragraph's full stop with no space between it and the full stop. ie
- "evidence indicates that tents in use at about 6500 BCE were of similar design to those still in use by the Sami nomads [4]"
- becomes
- "evidence indicates that tents in use at about 6500 BCE were of similar design to those still in use by the Sami nomads."[4]
- "There are few examples of Renaissance architecture in Norway, the most prominent being the Rosenkrantz Tower in Bergen, Barony Rosendal in Hardanger, and the contemporary Austråt manor near Trondheim, and parts of Akershus Fortress[15][16]."
- becomes
- "There are few examples of Renaissance architecture in Norway, the most prominent being the Rosenkrantz Tower in Bergen, Barony Rosendal in Hardanger, and the contemporary Austråt manor near Trondheim, and parts of Akershus Fortress."[15][16] etc.
- The FAC commenters made recommendations to avoid the use of short choppy writing style and single sentence paragraphs. There's still quite a lot of both in the article.
- "Many of the fortifications at border areas and ports were modernized in line with Baroque military practice.
- Although most residences were built according to local vernacular traditions, some manors (such as Austråt and Rosendal) show influence from Baroque architecture. The city of Christiania (Oslo) was the only one in which wooden buildings were not allowed, and a number of large town houses modeled after Continental building types were constructed. Some large churches were constructed with brick walls, notably in Bergen, Christiania, Røros[18] and Kongsberg[19] ."
- There's quite a bit of this sort of thing - no citation for "baroque military practice" - and no explanation of what it might be, what characteristics did the practice have, what was its purpose and defining features? 'Continental' doesn't need a capital letter. "The city of Christiania (Oslo) was the only one......." would be better written as "Christiania (now Oslo) was the only city in which timber buildings were prohibited, and a number of large townhouses, modeled in a continental style, were constructed." - You still need to describe what that style might be though.
- The article's pretty good on the whole but needs some real polish before submitting to FAC again.
- You should add the {{no icon}} (in Norwegian) before all the references in norwegian and {{en icon}} (in English) before all the english ones.
- A discussion of any influence upon and from the Architecture of Sweden would probably be appropriate.
--Mcginnly | Natter 13:42, 27 November 2006 (UTC)
- Thanks - feedback much appreciated. --Leifern 14:52, 27 November 2006 (UTC)