Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 July 22
- Please try and add additional reliable references to the article, and add names to the references already there, like this:
Example sentence <ref>[http://www.example.com/article/2345|Example article name]</ref>
Hope you understand. Chevymontecarlo - alt 05:30, 25 July 2010 (UTC)
Thanks! Wow, it's hard to find a free image. The one I uploaded turned out to be copywrited on Flickr. I did a lot of data collection, so I'm not sure I can find much more good references at this point - though I forwarded the link to Kamuela Kahoano and he didn't note anything was incorrect.
I think I'll just remove any image reference for now; perhaps someone else can provide a free one.
- Good job, but you will need possibly a few more reliable references\sources, to prove that he is notable enough for an encyclopedia article and (especially because he's a living person) to prove the accuracy of the article. Social networks, youtube, ect. can't be used. Looks pretty good though! Do you need help with making the picture work? ~ QwerpQwertus · Contact Me · 19:58, 22 July 2010 (UTC)
- You might also want to add an infobox to the article as well; you can use a preset template such as Template:Infobox person or something similar. Chevymontecarlo - alt 05:28, 25 July 2010 (UTC)
please give feedback also refer http://www.owleanimations.com/kokomoko.html
- Sorry, the article seems to have been deleted for being spam/advertising. In future you need to try and make your article's tone more neutral. Chevymontecarlo - alt 05:26, 25 July 2010 (UTC)
Hello, please can you review this new article (my first)? It's about an academic journal with a focus on issues of urbanization and the environment in the Global South. Many thanks, Anton.
- I think there are problems with the tone and language of the article; at the moment it sounds like an advertisement. Please see WP:TONE or WP:POV for more information. Please try and make the article's tone more neutral. Phrases like 'is one of the world's most widely read and cited peer-reviewed academic urban journals' can remain in the article but only if there's references to prove that. Chevymontecarlo - alt 05:24, 25 July 2010 (UTC)
Dear all, I am new to Wiki and need help. Could You please tell me if my article is ready to go live in the mainspace. Thank You very much.
Welcome to Wikipedia! There are some issues with your proposed article.
- The following should be helpful:
A few more points:
- the image used in your article does not appear to be copyright-free since it is linked to the person's website.
- The article uses no references and no inline citations. Please take a look at Citing sources. Citing sources for asserted facts helsp to prove an article's Notability, a key component of Wikipedia.
Hope that helps.Shearonink (talk) 18:29, 22 July 2010 (UTC)
- Nice work with the links, but as Shearonink says you need to try and use inline citations to display them correctly. Chevymontecarlo - alt 05:21, 25 July 2010 (UTC)
New page showing synposis and details for Never Look Away, a novel by Linwood Barclay
please delete
- Do you want me to delete the article? Send me a message here, thanks. I'll provide a brief review for you anyway. You might want to consider adding an infobox and more reliable references. Also if you can try and add more links. Chevymontecarlo
Jazz Singer/Actor Jonny Fair
Hello, I recently wrote a brief article on my favorite jazz singer Mr Jonny Fair. If you could be so kind as to review it if & when you get time & please comment about any improvements or suggestions? Thank You
- Okay, Wikipedia cannot be used as a reference, so please remove those references. I see you have made a few mistakes with the references, so here's an example of how it should be done:
Bob went to London <ref>[http://www.bobsmith.com/blog/125|Bob Smith's blog]</ref>.
The actual references need to be in the main part of the article, not in the references section. The references section is just for displaying the references. You need to add a {{reflist}} tag to the references section, so it will display all the references on the page with <ref> </ref> tags at the bottom in a list. Hope you understand! If you don't, please send me a message. Chevymontecarlo 05:12, 25 July 2010 (UTC)
http://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/User:Cujo411 - Can you provide feedback on this Christian Dating article which contrasts Biblical Courtship
[edit]Can you please review the Christian Dating article (Cujo411) and provide any feedback. Yes, I have references, they are cited in the article and I have yet to readd the full references for the page. The topic is notable
Can Any one please provide me with the feedback about my page
Much improved in general from previous versions.
The following areas are still of concern:
- The details of the two boys' deaths (Johnathan Ball and Tim Parry), seem to be somewhat co-mingled. See Warrington bomb attacks.
- Tone of article still needs to be adjusted, for instance, another word should be substituted for "our" (as in "Our Peace Charter)
- History and Foundation Activities sections need to be sourced within the article itself as in Citing sources.
- Infobox list of Patrons (under Key people) is confusing to the casual viewer. Maybe list patrons in a separate section at the end of the article itself? (Participation by Notable people can sometimes be an indication of an article's Notability.)
Shearonink (talk) 17:39, 22 July 2010 (UTC)
Please review for accuracy.
- Please try and add suitable names to the references of the article, like this:
<ref>[http://www.newspaper.com/article/124|Newspaper article]</ref>
- I hope you understand. If you don't please send me a message. Also, there's tone problems with the article. It sounds like an advertisement. Please try and rewrite it to try and make it more neutral. For more information on this please see WP:TONE or WP:POV. Thanks. Chevymontecarlo 08:46, 23 July 2010 (UTC)
- Please try and add suitable names to the references of the article, like this:
<ref>[http://www.newspaper.com/article/124|Newspaper article]</ref>
- I hope you understand. If you don't please send me a message. Thanks. Chevymontecarlo 08:42, 23 July 2010 (UTC)
Please review. ~~Kscostelloe (talk) 20:16, 22 July 2010 (UTC)
- Hi, as the template box at the top of the article says, please try and rewrite the article in a more neutral point of view/style, because at the moment the article sounds like an advertisement for the company. If it sounds like an ad it's likely to just get deleted for spam reasons, so I recommend that you do this. More information on tone and language styles on Wikipedia are available at WP:TONE or WP:POV. Thanks. Chevymontecarlo 08:40, 23 July 2010 (UTC)
Does this look right?
- Please add suitable names to the references, like this:
<ref>[http://www.newspaper.com/article/124|Newspaper article]</ref>
- I can see you've used inline citations to display your references, and that is great, but the references just need some names. It's better to have a descriptive name that is useful to the reader rather than just a bare URL. Also please try and do the same to the external links as well, as they have the same problem. As well as this, I think you should try adding sections to the article, just to try and break up the long paragraphs you have at the moment. Finally, I think an infobox would be great. You can use a template like Template:Infobox person or something similar. Thanks. Chevymontecarlo 08:37, 23 July 2010 (UTC)
Sorry, link is http://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/Loggerhead_Club_%26_Marina Request Feedback. Sources and references linked to article.