Wikipedia:Peer review/Virtual Self (EP)/archive1

Virtual Self (EP)

I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to bring it to FA status.

Thanks, Skyshiftertalk 17:20, 19 October 2024 (UTC)

Dylan620

Hi Skyshifter, I'm sorry to have missed your ping on the article's talk page – I should be able to take another look at this article in the next day or two. Dylan620 (he/him • talk • edits) 18:54, 29 October 2024 (UTC)

@Skyshifter: I have just finished re-reading the article, and I have to say I'm quite pleased. I'm seeing quite a bit of improvement over the version I reviewed at FAC a couple months ago. I do have a couple new comments:

• Robinson suffered from depression and struggled to create a follow-up. – The MOS cautions against using the word suffer because it may imply general incapacitation; might I suggest rewording this as as follows? Robinson struggled to create a follow-up; he underwent a period of writer's block that was intensified by depression.
• Virtual Self's first live performance debuted on December 8, 2017 → Robinson first performed as Virtual Self on December 8, 2017

Dylan620 (he/him • talk • edits) 22:35, 2 November 2024 (UTC)

@Dylan620: All fixed, thank you! Sorry for the delay. Skyshiftertalk 21:49, 22 November 2024 (UTC)

Dxneo

Hello Sky, currently can't do much as I've explained on userpage, but I'll do my absolute best. In the meantime, please consider reviewing this request.

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• I am aware of this archive and Dylan really outdid himself. I like to take reference from FAs like Red and/or articles undergoing FAC, so bare with me and let me know if you disagree with (some of) my suggestions.
• Question: Is Virtual Self also a record label?
  • The EP is listed as being released through "Virtual Self" though it likely means that it just was self-released. Fixed
• For such a long article, I'd say lead can be expanded a little.
  • I don't think there's much that can be added specifically. Any suggestions?
• I think Sound would be better if it was moved to Composition since it is about the themes and sound of the record.
  • Done
• Virtual Self shows continued starting in August 2018, with the two-month North American "Utopia System" tour. ===> Virtual Self shows continued in August 2018, with the two-month North American Utopia System Tour.
  • Fixed
• The last paragraph on Promotion and release is a one-line paragraph which is discouraged. I think it would be better if it was merged with the former para. Thoughts?
  • Done
• For Reception, I found Sputnikmusic and few other reviews, but I couldn't verify their reliability. Sputnikmusic is okay.
  • I don't think Sputnikmusic is high quality enough for FA. Their staff usually don't have any credentials. Recently there was some discussion over if it was reliable.
• I'm not really sure about the YouTube source since I can't verify the publisher's reliability, but previous reviewers approved it so I guess it's okay.
  • It should be fine as an interview.
• Media files are looking good, refs are archived and linked. This a very good piece. Good job. dxneo (talk) 20:25, 7 November 2024 (UTC)
  • @Dxneo: thank you! Sorry for the delay. Skyshiftertalk 22:08, 22 November 2024 (UTC)