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Tone cluster

I think we can get this to a featured article but the article has reach an impasse. Help with definitions and comments are welcome. Hyacinth 02:49, 18 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

It's a very nice article. I can offer a few comments ranging from the general to the picky:

Is there a place for discussion of music perception as relates to tone clusters? (Dissonance?)
Music criticism related to?
I see there are external links for listening, but in-wiki samples would be nice. Even fair-use samples would be clearly illustrative and pass the test better than most uses.
I find starting a section with a quotation (In early 20th-century classical compositions) a little awkward.
"In 1914, Ornstein debuted several ~~of his~~ solo piano compositions, including …, that were the first works to explore the tone cluster in depth ever heard by a substantial audience". This doesn't feel right. Split into two sentences or change to ", which were"?
The following phrase is poetic but leaves out a verb, which might be reasonably expected: "—in the second movement, Hawthorne, of the Concord Sonata (ca. 1904–19, publ. 1920, prem. 1928), mammoth piano chords, some gentle, some violent, requiring a wooden bar almost fifteen inches long to play".
In the Schoenberg quote, is "near–tone" meant to have an en-dash instead of a hyphen?
Would you want a copy of "Cowell's Clusters", Michael Hicks, The Musical Quarterly 1993?

–Outriggr § 00:50, 20 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Is this why peer review is under-resourced—because comments go into a void? –Outriggr § 10:23, 3 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Perhaps users, such as myself, don't know how to transclude. Hyacinth 22:32, 7 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]