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Tokyo subway sarin attack

I've listed this article for peer review because… I've expanded the abstract and added significant amounts of previous missing and relevant information - mostly pertaining to the background of the attack, and which now answer questions which came to mind during my first reading (such as 'how did Aum acquire sarin, a dangerous nerve agent? Why did they choose to pursue sarin?' etc). I believe this has made the article sufficiently broad while not drifting from the topic itself.

This is the first article i've made significant contributions to, so i'd like any information to improve the article such that it can be considered of the highest quality. Thanks, Fouriels (talk) 23:17, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

Comments

• Each paragraph should have at least one supporting citation
• "With the intention of building a compound incorporating facilities such as a phosgene plant (as well as facilities to manufacture VX and chlorine gas, Aum Shinrikyo used 14 dummy companies to purchase acres of land in Namino (now part of Aso city), and began construction" - grammar
• All book citations should generally include page numbers
• Try to avoid one-sentence paragraphs
• Suggest scaling up the maps, and each should include on its image description page an explanation of the data sources supporting them

Sunriseshore's comments

• This appears to be a well rounded and sourced article at this time. Good Work!