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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I've been doing a fair bit of work on it and I'd really like some feedback on what needs improvement, with a view to bringing the article up to GA quality.

Thanks, Shoemoney2night (talk) 05:05, 14 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • Image:Timminchin.jpg seems to have some licence issues.
  • Link pilot to the appropriate article.
  • "...his first one-hour show.[7] His break-out show..." - 2x show, can we use a synonym to brighten that up?
  • I reckon the Ediburgh Fringe Festival could be linked.
  • "to convey visuals" this is a little bit unencyclopedic... what exactly do you mean by "visuals"?
  • "critic of religion " why not "religious critic".
  • "it has yet to be picked up " again, a little show-biz-speak for me...
  • Last few lines of Acting section is unreferenced.
  • 7 external links is a little over the top.

The Rambling Man (talk) 15:07, 17 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

All fixed except Edinburgh Fringe (which is already linked) and the acting section, for which I'm going to have to do a bit more research. Cheers! -Shoemoney2night (talk) 21:03, 17 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]