Wikipedia:Peer review/The Orb/archive1

I'd like to hear what others think needs to be done to make it into an FA (its currently a GA). Much copyediting needs to be done still, but what other issues are there? Is there too much information? Are some parts confusing? Is there anything that needs to be explained to those not familiar with electronic music? Those are just a couple concerns I have at this point - all general comments and suggestions are still needed of course. Thanks in advance! Wickethewok 08:46, 14 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
No one? Wickethewok 22:34, 26 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comment Wish I knew what needs addressing, but you're better off giving editors a bell who usually hang around FAC and object for specific reasons. See if they can give you some ideas. LuciferMorgan 03:21, 7 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Great work Wicket, looks and reads really well. A few suggestions, though some may be subjective:

"Their early performances were inspired by ambient producers, most notably..." - clarify that these influences were from an earlier period, and the The Orb helped re-popularised the genre.
"Trippy sound" could be blue linked to psychedelic.
"Albums by The Orb have appeared on the UK Albums Chart" - how many albums?
Would be very interested to know what hand Paterson had in the production of Chill Out.
Two consecutive sentences begin with "As a result of the break-up".
"At least six studios and twenty outside musicians were used over the course of three weeks of recording" - sounds intriguing, why was this? How were they able to afford such production?
"many trip-hop groups sprang up emulating The Orb's "chill-out blueprint"" - might be worth name dropping a few.
"The Orb's more recent influences consist largely of German techno producers" - such as...
"the chemical generation" may need to be clarified.
The 'Imagery' section is very good; great idea. + Ceoil 22:12, 8 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the suggestions, Ceoil! I'll get on this stuff soon. :-) Wickethewok 16:23, 15 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]