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Swindon Town F.C.

The article is currently rated GA and I'm (hopefully) working towards FA. Input on the article layout and quality of prose would be great especially suggestions on how to rework the first four paragraphs of History into something which reads better. Foxhill 19:32, 8 August 2007 (UTC)

• The History jumps from 1920 to 1969 - what happened in this period?
• A few things which could do with citations:
  • ...defeated Luton Town F.C. 9–1 in their first game of the season. This result stands as a record for the club in League matches.
  • the Football Association had previously agreed to inclusion criteria with the organizers which mandated that only League Cup winners from Division One would be able to take part.
  • They were relegated after recording only five wins and conceding 100 goals — the latter record has yet to be broken.
  • The addition of floodlights in 1951 at a cost of £350, gave Swindon the honour of being the first League club to do so.
  • The ground itself is on land owned by Swindon Borough Council to whom the club pay rent.
  • The completion of this match meant that Swindon had played a League game at home and away against every current team in the FA Premier League, Championship, League One and League Two. - though presumably the promotion of Morecambe and Dagenham & Redbridge makes this outdated.
• long unsuccessful period culminating in them being relegated "Culminating" is inappropriate here, as it generally means "reaching the highest point".
• I think the amount of detail about hooliganism is excessive - we're not talking Chelsea Headhunters type notoriety. The incidents mentioned, while regrettable, look like isolated events rather than a recurring trend.
• Some of those rivalries look like non-entities e.g. Swindon Fans do not seriously consider them as rivals. If anything, mentioning so many clubs gives the impression that the club lacks strong rivalries.
• Ditch the bolded headings in the colours and kits section
• Trim the staff list. In particular, do not include those who are not notable enough for their own article.

Hope this helps. Oldelpaso 18:56, 11 August 2007 (UTC)

Thanks for this review Oldelpaso, i'll get working on it now. Cheers - Foxhill 12:22, 13 August 2007 (UTC)

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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Davnel03 17:21, 16 August 2007 (UTC)