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Smedley Butler

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I've listed this article for peer review because it is already a good article with what I think is a good foundation for A or FA and I need to solicite comments in order to get it up to that level.

Thanks, Kumioko (talk) 17:58, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

AustralianRupert

Just a couple of minor points, as I haven't had a chance to read over the whole thing yet.

• In the infobox, the bullet points are appearing in their 'unwikified' form, could these be tweaked to appear wikified?

I don't see this, could you tell me which one is doing this?--Kumioko (talk) 02:45, 12 August 2009 (UTC)

Might be just my browser, strange...anyway the ones that are doing it are in the Battles/wars area (Tientsin, San Tan Pating, and Second Battle of Veracruz) — AustralianRupert (talk) 05:15, 12 August 2009 (UTC)

• There are a couple of very large block quotes, are these really needed? Perhaps these could be put into own words?

I found some good stuff related to his antiwar activity and I am drafting up a couple paragraphs. Once I get them done I will remove this and replace it with something a little more meaningful. --Kumioko (talk) 00:58, 13 August 2009 (UTC)

• In the military awards section, the ribbon for the MOH seems different to the image of the one (two) the subject received. Could be confusing.

I don't understand, are you saying that the ribbon in the display is different than the Medal displayed? If thats the case your sorta right, the ribbon has been the same but the medal changed from theh one displayed to the current neck ribbon. --Kumioko (talk) 02:45, 12 August 2009 (UTC)

Just the colour, thats all. It might be the image quality of the full medal in the infobox which makes it look like a different colour (darker in the infobox)...or just me again. — AustralianRupert (talk) 05:19, 12 August 2009 (UTC)

Anyway, I will try to have a better look later. Good work so far. Cheers.— AustralianRupert (talk) 01:14, 12 August 2009 (UTC)

I also fixed some dab links and reworded a few things, i am going to look at the links next. --Kumioko (talk) 02:45, 12 August 2009 (UTC)

Kumioko

I know I submitted this but there are a couple things that I found and will address so I wanted to note them so its out here. Plus this way if someone should feel so inclined to do some thats ok with me too.

• Need to add alt text to images
• Need to review fix and or expand some of the references. Also a couple that appear to be broken.
• Fix some dab links, I did some already.

This is pretty much done. It still looks like there are a couple but the pages include the definition of what they are linked for. --Kumioko (talk) 00:56, 13 August 2009 (UTC)

• Add more info for Honduras.

Done. Still need to add some but I expanded it quite a but. --Kumioko (talk) 00:56, 13 August 2009 (UTC)

• Need to add some info about him from the other side, the article currently makes him seem without flaws but reading his book he states that they "hunted the cacos like pigs" so it seems as though the article needs some balance there.
• Need to expand the business plot section a bit.

Also need to add more here but its much better now. --Kumioko (talk) 00:56, 13 August 2009 (UTC)

• Need to add some more info about his speaking and post retirement life. For example his former friends distanced themselves from him and basically cut ties and stopped visiting due to his antiwar rhetoric.
• There are a couple places that need refs.

Done. --Kumioko (talk) 00:56, 13 August 2009 (UTC)

• Expand the public safety section, there is a lot more to the story here and some of it is very interesting and in some cases amusing (like removing the roofs from the police cars so the police couldn't take naps on duty anymore).
• I also might try and fill in some of the red links with new articles (or link to existing articles if applicable.--Kumioko (talk) 03:24, 12 August 2009 (UTC)