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Scarborough F.C. seasons[edit]

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I have created this list with the intention of a WP:FLC nomination, and was hoping to see what needs to be done before I do so. Thanks, Mattythewhite (talk) 13:32, 6 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

"playing in minor football" - needs explanation for non experts.
- Doing... I'll need to look into this further. Mattythewhite (talk) 12:26, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Done I've removed "minor football" - I'm not sure where I found the phrase in the first place... quite bemused. Mattythewhite (talk) 12:30, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Image caption is a sentence fragment so remove the full stop.
- Done Removed. Mattythewhite (talk) 12:26, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"during the early 1880s the club participated in the Scarborough & East Riding County Cup." - so no league? Maybe re-affirm the fact that no league games were played by the club.
- Done Clarified. Mattythewhite (talk) 12:26, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"from 1910–1914," - from 1910 to 1914 is better (English over en-dash).
- Done Changed. Mattythewhite (talk) 12:26, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"the club moved to compete" - "the club competed in" will do.
- Done Rewritten. Mattythewhite (talk) 12:26, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"but after one season there they joined the Midland League" = needs explanation - how/why did they do this?
- Doing... Shall need to find out. Mattythewhite (talk) 12:26, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Done Mentioned how it was a "stonger" league. Mattythewhite (talk) 15:48, 14 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"...competed in the Midland League for over 30 years, which included a seven-year absence ..." - so they didn't "compete" for over 30 years if for seven years there was no competition, right?
- Done Rewritten. Mattythewhite (talk) 12:26, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"which was the club's final as " - final season... for clarity (not to be confused with other footballing finals...)
- Done Rewritten. Mattythewhite (talk) 12:26, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Problem with table - missing cell at the end of the Second World War line.
- Done Fixed. Mattythewhite (talk) 12:26, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Why are some top scorers red and some not linked? Probably good reasons but I'm confused.
- Doing... The ones with red links are notable by passing WP:BIO and I'm in the process of creating their articles (should have mentioned this really...), and the unlinked top scorers are not notable. Mattythewhite (talk) 12:26, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - Done All top scorer articles now created. Mattythewhite (talk) 17:33, 11 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Notes and References sometimes now merged under a general "References" section with "General" and "Specific" as subheadings.
- Done Reorganised. Mattythewhite (talk) 12:26, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

That should help a bit. The Rambling Man (talk) 21:26, 9 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

This looks ready for FLC. Decent lead, and a comprehensive list. I started a list of prose issues, but decided it would be easier to fix them myself. Oldelpaso (talk) 14:04, 11 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]