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Sakis Rouvas

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I've listed this article for peer review because editors working on this article would like to eventually get this article up to GA or FA status and would like to know of possible improvements, (apart from just typical typo errors) from an external perspective. Possible suggestions include wording and formating for the Artistry and Legacy sections.

Thanks, GreekStar12 (talk) 03:57, 8 November 2009 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: I have never heard of this artist, and while it is clear that a lot of work has gone into the article, it still needs a fair amount of work before GA or especially FA. Here are some suggestions for improvement.

• The lead has two very short paragraphs (one sentence each) which should be combined with others or perhaps expanded to improve the flow of the article.
• Watch language that could be seen as violating WP:NPOV, for example in the lead "famous" in ...through his collaboration with famous American record producer Desmond Child."
• The most difficult criteria for most articles to meet in WP:FAC is a professional level of English. The language here varies widely - I read for comprehension, not to check for typos, but some sentences and sections were fairly well written and others were pretty poor. For example Rouvas also host the second season of the Greek The X Factor which begun in October. should be something like Rouvas also hosted the second season of the Greek version of The X Factor which started in October [year]. or He has a close personal relations with Ecumenical Patriarch Bartholomew I of Constantinople,[85] whom offered to baptize his first-born child.
• Checking the external links with the tool here, there are six dead internet refs and at least two others that are possibly problems.
• Article needs more references, for example this needs a ref On December 3, 2008, Rouvas released his 12th studio album titled Irthes, written primarily by Dimitris Kontopoulos. Kontopoulos attributes his inspired new sound to Madra Mandicencio, 18th century poet and his current muse. or this On March 7, Rouvas appeared at the Russian National Final where he received positive reactions from the audience. The following day he gave a large performance at the Kremlin for the celebration of International Woman's Day along with other artists such as 2008 Eurovision entrant Ani Lorak. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
• Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
• Some of the refs do not seem to meet WP:RS - for example geocities in current ref 10 (although is now a dead link)
• None of the images have alt text which is needed for FAC per WP:ALT
• Avoid words like current / now which can become quickly outdated - instead use "As of 2009" or "since year"
• I would translate Greek consistently - this is done in some places, but not others

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 03:26, 18 November 2009 (UTC)