I've listed this article for peer review because I've been working on it a lot over the past few weeks and I'd like feedback and ideas for the article. I want to try to get it to GA standard, when the game is fully released.
Thanks, Anarchyte05:05, 6 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from AdrianGamer
* The released field for the infobox should be date(s) for the game's final release.
It only has a multiplayer mode. It is available on Mac, Microsoft Windows, and Linux. - Try to combine the two sentence together, or alter the second sentence so that it does not start with "It is" (repetition)
The game is multiplayer only which means a constant internet connection is required to play - You mention the game being multiplayer once already. Try to move the first mention here
The player must try and survive by crafting items and tools using the materials they gather, steal and find. - Should rephrase it to "the game tasks players to survive by crafting items using the materials they gather, steal and find.
Try to expand that two-sentence paragraph. It does not look nice.
I merged it with the previous paragraph, they're talking about the same thing, the multiplayer and team building concept. Anarchyte06:59, 7 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
The development for Rust began as a clone of DayZ, a popular mod for ARMA 2, as well as featuring elements of Minecraft - Being a mod and featuring elements of Minecraft are not related
I think the sentence is saying "it features elements from ARMA, DayZ and Minecraft" but in no particular order. How do you think this could be reworked? Anarchyte06:59, 7 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
I misread that sentence. Sorry about that.
You should paraphrase the quote from Facepunch's CEO
The initial launch of the game on December 11, 2013. What features are included in that version.
In late 2014, an "experimental mode" for Rust was released and the game was ported onto Unity 5 - What is the original engine? Any information on that?
On 8 February 2014, the placeholder zombie mobs were removed so users wouldn't get too attached to them and replaced with another placeholder red bears and wolves - Don't understand what this means. Instead of users, it should be "players"
Another PC Gamer writer, Christopher Livingston wrote a 3 day 'diary' about his experiences in the games world and how the gameplay works - Does not really sound like something related to the reception section.
It may be the end of 2015 before Rust is actually better than it was at the start of 2014, but I’m positive it will be worth the wait and patience - Again, why he praised that. Also, try to paraphrase all the quotes you use.
Other games, such as The Forest, H1Z1, Unturned, and Ark: Survival Evolved - The source only compared Ark to Rust, not others.
At the end of the paragraph there's another reference which talks about H1Z1 and The Forest. I removed the Unturned one when it was added. Anarchyte06:59, 7 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
These games also have crafting mechanics similar to Rust. - Unnecessary.
It is part of the lead. References should not be used per WP:LEAD.
Overall, the article's development and reception section need expansion. The development section can have more about the game's design, while the reception section could be expanded. For instance, what reviewers liked and disliked about the game.
You can copyedit the article again so as to make sure that the article is free from any grammatical error. One more reminder is that you should nominate the article after the game's release, or it will basically be an instant fail. Hope these comments help. AdrianGamer (talk) 12:16, 6 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
This request looks premature, a quick google news search finds there's lots more to cover in this article. Such as penis size[1] got lots of coverage, sales of 750,000[2] cheating should be discussed[3] what about Mr Berry[4]?--Vaypertrail (talk) 17:35, 31 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
