Wikipedia:Peer review/Royal necropolis of Byblos/archive1
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I've listed this article for your perusal and suggestions because I am hoping to drive it to FA status. Thank you all in advance.el.ziade (talkallam) 18:36, 15 March 2022 (UTC)
- On a quick look, seems nearly ready. The lead is far too long, and below that some paras too long. The lead should give approximate dates for the tombs, with alternatives if necessary. Also say where Byblos is "on the Mediterranean coast of modern Lebanon" maybe. You may get complaints about the age of some of the refs used, probably wrongly. English may need some touching up for idioms. Johnbod (talk) 14:24, 10 April 2022 (UTC)
- @Johnbod thank you for the review. I added some details about the tell's location, and tomb dates in the lead. I removed some passages without affecting the coverage of the lead. I understand the concerns regarding the dates, but the works of the French archaeologist are seminal, and form the basis of subsequent studies. el.ziade (talkallam) 09:10, 12 April 2022 (UTC)
- On the last point, I understand completely, but some FAC reviewers are likely not to. Johnbod (talk) 13:11, 12 April 2022 (UTC)
- @Johnbod thank you for the review. I added some details about the tell's location, and tomb dates in the lead. I removed some passages without affecting the coverage of the lead. I understand the concerns regarding the dates, but the works of the French archaeologist are seminal, and form the basis of subsequent studies. el.ziade (talkallam) 09:10, 12 April 2022 (UTC)