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Rob Hamill

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I've listed this article for peer review because… I think that I have been through all online sources, adding relevant information. What needs to be done to get this up to GA?

Thanks, Adabow (talk) 10:37, 6 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Doing... Esuzu (talk • contribs) 14:54, 10 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Esuzu - Hello! I am Esuzu and will try to help you make this article achieve GA status. Please respond directly under each comment I make so I can easily check what you have done. Esuzu (talk • contribs) 14:56, 10 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

General

The article is very short. To reach GA it needs to be "broad in its coverage." Try expanding it, the Biography could start with "Early years" including education so the reader get a good insight in his life.
Not many other articles link to him. Try to find other articles which mentions Hamill and link to this article.

I used the search tool, and found about six more pages to link from. Adabow (talk) 10:03, 11 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

On a quick look the sources looks OK. With that many sources it shouldn't be hard to add more relevant information.
The lead, most readers will only read this, needs to be expanded. The lead should summarise the whole article. Currently it does far from that. Look at Madonna (entertainer) for an example of how a lead can look for a living person.

How is it now? Adabow (talk) 06:36, 15 June 2010 (UTC)'[reply]

Expand the article first. Then you can expand the lead as well. It has a long way to go I and I am not sure this is ready for Peer review yet. You need to add much more information into the article. Esuzu (talk • contribs) 06:43, 15 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

There are some ^[which?] in the text. Resolving them would be a good start.