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Penn State Nittany Lions women's soccer

I've listed this article for peer review because I have done a complete rewrite on the page and I believe it is up to the standards for it to become a GA. I also would love any and all feedback as this is my first ground up rewrite.

Thanks, NoahRiffe (talk) 19:50, 23 May 2021 (UTC)

Comments from The Most Comfortable Chair

Some general things that jump out to me:

• The lead should be expanded a little more. It should be a summary of the contents in the article, so it should be covering brief but important details from the History, Uniforms, crest and colors, Stadium, Supporters, and Honors sections. If there are any players that have become significant to the team's history or for the sport in general, they should be mentioned here as well (for instance, see the fourth paragraph of the lead of FC Barcelona).
• There is a lot of duplicate linking in the article — per MOS:DL, a link should only appear once in an article. Although they can be repeated in the lead, infobox, tables, media captions, and citations.
• Uniforms, crest and colors section can cover more on how their previous designs were briefly.
• Roster and Notable alumnae could potentially be divided into two columns for ease of reading (like in this section).
• Use consistent dating format for references. Some references require additional parameters — make sure that all references have work and/or publisher, first and last, and accessdate parameters whenever possible.

I have not looked at the prose closely, but it looks good to me. You have done a great job at writing it from scratch essentially. All the best with the good article nomination. — The Most Comfortable Chair 08:35, 12 June 2021 (UTC)