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Mr. Lady Records

I saved a stub from deletion last month, and I've - with some help - got it to GA status. Since then, I have expanded and referenced it further, even finding a book mention. I'd like to see if I can spruce it up a little more, and would like additional input. I'm not sure if there's enough information available on defunct feminist indie record labels to get it to FA, but that's the dream. Even if not, I would like it to be as good as it can be, so thoughts, suggestions and comment are welcome. Thanks. Proto ► 13:43, 20 February 2007 (UTC)

• Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 22:39, 26 February 2007 (UTC)

Michaelas10

Looks very good overall, and no, getting it an FA isn't a dream. It could use a lot of copyediting however. My suggestions:

• General:
  • Sole years (e.g. 1996) shouldn't be linked per WP:DATE, and full dates should be linked entirely (e.g. 10 January 2007).
  • Please use the citation templates on references per the manual of style.
  • Add the corresponding infobox of recording labels ({{infobox record label}}) at the top of the article.
  • Reviews should be split out of the lead and the "Background" section to a new "Reception" section.
  • Split information about the band becoming defunct from the "Background" section to a new section with additional information from here.
  • References 5 and 25 needs to go right after the text, without an external space. References 14, 15, 16, 17, 13 need to go after the punctuation mark.
  • ...now defunct > ...which became defunct in 2004.
  • Be more specific in the "Artists formerly on Mr. Lady" section references, rather than providing the band's website itself. Also, I suggest moving the section to Artists formerly on Mr. Lady and adding that as a "main" article for the "Artists and releases" section in order to avoid the article becoming too listy.
  • This website is down.
  • The two formed Mr. Lady to make women's music and videos accessible and affordable - Duplication of the previous sentence.
• Copyediting related:
  • In March, 2001 - Remove comma.
  • ...by women.". - Remove the second period.
  • ...a record company With - Remove capitalization.
  • ...records (along with - Remove bracket.
  • Kaia Wilson released a statment confirming this in June 1999, stating - Replace "stating" with a colon. "...statment" > "...statement".
  • Formally backing the festival's trans-exclusion policy led to protests and boycotts aimed towards Mr. Lady acts, and Wilson and The Butchies in particular, from groups such as Camp Trans, who disagreed with Mr. Lady's stance and felt that the group and the label exploited transgendered images - Split this to two sentences starting with "Wilson and The Butchies". "...who" > "...have". "...the label" > "...label".

I have further copyediting suggestions, but I strongly advice requesting a different editor with a strategic distance to pass through the article to check for mistakes (I'd be happy to do so if you would like me to). Thanks. Michaelas10 (Talk) 16:30, 1 March 2007 (UTC)

• The automated suggestions aren't much help (it wants to fix contractions from inside quotes, and that's about it). The copyedits are done, dates are fixed, Quails website removed, It would be great if you could pass over it, Michael, thanks - a couplde of the chnages you suggested I know I've missed. The citation templates are a nightmare to put in, so I have not used them (use is neither reccomended for or against on Wikipedia:Citation templates). Artists formerly on Mr. Lady would not be a suitable article for Wikipedia. I will expand this out later with a little text on each band, to make it a paragraph rather than a list. Proto ► 19:04, 2 March 2007 (UTC)
• I've given it a proofread. Michaelas10 (Talk) 18:29, 3 March 2007 (UTC)

SatyrTN

I've gotten pretty good at the {{cite}} templates. While they're neither recommended nor discouraged, they do ensure the cites are done in the proper way. I'm not saying the ones on here are improper, btw! :) But if you'd like, I can do that. -- SatyrTN (talk | contribs) 22:23, 2 March 2007 (UTC)

That would be great, thanks! I can do one or two, but it's trial and error - I can't seem to get my head around them :( Neil (not Proto ►) 16:32, 5 March 2007 (UTC)

I've gone through the refs and reformatted using the appropriate {{cite}} templates. -- SatyrTN (talk | contribs) 23:26, 5 March 2007 (UTC)

That's a really big help, thank you very much. Neil (not Proto ►) 12:41, 6 March 2007 (UTC)