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I've been working on this article for a while now, and appart from a few more sources and details in the history I'm unsure how to go about improving it further. Any feedback how how I might get the aricle up to GA status would be most welcome.Rehevkor 14:46, 30 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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  •  Done. Removed dates and I believe any other links are already in context. Rehevkor
  •  Done. Trimed down as much as I could. Rehevkor
    • While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 11 additive terms, a bit too much.
  •  Done. Got rid of most.. I think. Rehevkor

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Davnel03 20:55, 30 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]