Wikipedia:Peer review/Mac OS X/archive1

Read very good comment related to the Mac OS X fac nomination. This article obviously requires a peer review. Emx 14:00, 13 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ _t 00:05, 14 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

- Lead needs to put in actual times, not vague terms like "current" or "now" (Try "As of 2006,..."). Also lead should summarize the whole article but does not (none of the cat name versions are mentioned in the lead, for example). Final point, many of the headers and subheaders contain the name of the article and should not. So "Mac OS X v10.0 (Cheetah)" could be "Version 10.0 (Cheetah)" or "v10.0 (Cheetah)" and "Criticisms of Mac OS X" would just be "Criticisms". Hope these comments help, Ruhrfisch 02:52, 28 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]