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List of Washington & Jefferson College buildings

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I've listed this article for peer review because...it is an atypical list. Instead of just listing buildings, I have written short or medium length notes about each building. There really aren't any featured lists of college buildings,so I kind of built it as I went. This article has been expanded significantly in the last few months, and I believe that it might be close to qualifying as a Featured List.

Cheers! GrapedApe (talk) 03:08, 18 May 2010 (UTC)

First of all, excellent list! It's funny, I was recently thinking about doing this same thing for my own school. It's looking very nice already, with a little bit of work I'm sure it would pass FLC. My comments:

• Remove bold formatting of building names in the prose - this is only done with the first mention of the article title. See WP:MOSBOLD.--done
• Is there a difference between Washington College and Washington Academy? If so, what is Washington Academy?
  • Yep, that wasn't covered in the lead. I tried to clarify it, so let me know if that worked. Giving a summary of the origins of the college is difficult, so I'd appreciate any suggestions on the lead. The full story is covered in Washington & Jefferson College#History.--GrapedApe (talk) 15:40, 19 May 2010 (UTC)
    • I think it is clear now, thanks. Jujutacular ^T · C 16:44, 19 May 2010 (UTC)
• "Through its history, McMillan Hall..." 'Throughout' would probably work better here.--done
• I notice many uses of "College" (uppercase) when the proper name isn't being used. Shouldn't this be lowercase?
  • Yeah. I think I got them all.
• "In 2002, the Old Gym was renovated to make room for the Swanson Wellness Center" - Make it clear that the Swanson Wellness Center is a part of Old Gym (I had to look at Old Gym to understand this sentence).
  • Look better now?
    • Much better, thanks. Jujutacular ^T · C 17:43, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
• Just learned a new word - "abut". Thank you. :)
• "Electrical Engineering Building" again, unless proper - should be lowercase.
  • Yeah, that's a proper name.
• "50,000 foot²" The superscript here seems very awkward to me. WP:UNIT says to always use superscripts, but personally I've only seen "square foot" before. What's your opinion?
  • I used the {{Ft2 to m2}} template to change them out, and I think it looks better.
    • Agreed. Jujutacular ^T · C 17:43, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
• "...houses classrooms and the Departments of Art, Theatre, and Communication, and Music" too many and's there.
  • I think I clarified that. The Department of "Departments of Art, Theatre, and Communication" is all one department, so it can get complicated. --done
    • Oooh, I see now, thanks. Jujutacular ^T · C 17:43, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
• "as well as the Yost Auditorium, asn 84-seat lecture hall" typo?--done
• "A statute of a coal miner" I'm thinking it should be statue.--embarrassing typo. done
• "It was designed to satisfy the LEED Silver qualifications for green buildings" Does it satisfy those qualifications? If the info is available, add it.
  • Yeah, I wrote it that way, because I don't think the building has been certified yet.
• "were occupied by Greek organizations" lowercase.
  • Shouldn't Greek be capitalized? Fraternities and sororities has it capitalized.--done
    • I see, you're right. Thanks. Jujutacular ^T · C 17:43, 20 May 2010 (UTC)

Jujutacular ^T · C 06:28, 19 May 2010 (UTC)

Comments

• I'd love to see a lead image, just to grab attention.

• I agree, but I'm not sure that we have one that works. I'm going to see what I can find.--GrapedApe (talk) 02:39, 25 May 2010 (UTC)

• What's a "frontier clerygm[a]n"?
  • I clarified it. Look better?--GrapedApe (talk) 01:48, 25 May 2010 (UTC)
• "located Canonsburg" located in? -done
• Not convinced I need to know which streets border the campus.

• Yeah, I was trying to find some evidence to show that the college extends into the East Washington Historic District, which I couldn't find. I'll probably cut that during the FLC if other people don't see it as important. I'm non-committal on that sentence.--GrapedApe (talk) 01:23, 25 May 2010 (UTC)

• "Present-day McMillan Hall,..." is that sentence not a fragment? Couldn't see a verb... (so no period required). Check other captions. -done
• I would link mace appropriately.-done
• 2 story->two-story -done
• "26 note " -> 26-note -done
• "an 1881 alumni" alumnus (singular)-done
• "in Summer 2008" any reason to capitalise summer?-No good reason, so fixed
• "group of alumni on" you link alumni after the first use of alumn[i].-done
• [86][47] please put these in numerical order.-done
• You have mixed date formats in the references (e.g. ref 32 has June 18, 2006 for its date while most other dates in the refs are ISO).-done
• En-dashes for year ranges. Ref 44 for instance needs an en-dash, not a hyphen.

• I always mess these up. Isn't there a script or bot somewhere that can change these?--GrapedApe (talk) 01:23, 25 May 2010 (UTC)

• check out User:GregU/dashes.js --ImGz (t/c) 03:14, 25 May 2010 (UTC)

• Refs 110, 111 have an issue with publisher... -done

The Rambling Man (talk) 21:06, 24 May 2010 (UTC)

Comments

• Not a lot I can find that hasn't been brought up. I ran a script to fix the dashes mentioned above and fixed the order of a few references for you. -Thanks!

• "ADMINISTRATION BUILDING" doesn't need to be in all caps. --done
• "pp. 31." it's one page so it should be p. --done
• Two references (114, 115) link Washington and Jefferson College the rest do not. Consistency? --de-linked all around
• You use W&J within the article without introducing it prior. Please clarify what it stands for.--done

--ImGz (t/c) 03:14, 25 May 2010 (UTC)