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I've been working on this and I am hoping to get it to FL status. Thoughy I'd best bring it up for peer review to see what else needs doing. Needs more references for Notable players and more context but more ideas greatly appreciated! Mattythewhite 13:22, 30 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Three comments that I see:
  • You use "The Roar" in the lead without explaining what it is (though I can find out through wikilinks) - I'd recommended just noting what that is in the lead. I didn't see anything else like that on a readthrough, but just doublecheck that.
  •  Done Replaced the Roar with Sydney - the Roar refers to Queensland Roar (wrong team!), which was there as I have based this off their list and never realised about changing it. Mattythewhite 16:54, 30 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Any possible way of getting an image of the whole team from one of the seasons in this? Since it's a "list of players" and not focusing on one, I think it would make more sense than to have a single image, though trying to get a not-non-free one might be a bit more difficult.
  • The "Notable players" section stands out as being the weakest part; I don't know if it's necessary to list them out as you do with a bulleted list. Consider: can this be made into a prose line, dropping the records and just standing each player's name (wikilinked and a reference next to it), and leaving it be like that? If those records along with the players are that notable, maybe it might be worthwhile to make a table, with the name, record information, and then a very very brief blurb about that person (ideally from your sources) as to why he's notable.
Looks good otherwise. --Masem 15:50, 30 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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