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I've listed this article for peer review because… whilst it has been a few years I think this is mainly complete but I think it needs a bit of looking over. What should I trim from the history and what else should I include? Anything else?

Thanks, Simply south ...... time, deparment skies for just 9 years 15:06, 30 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from RO

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Lead
  • The network has been extended and the capacity of its trains expanded so that now nearly 70 million journeys made every year.[1]
"journeys are made every year"?
History
  • For over 200 years London's docks and wharves thrived on imperial commerce.
It's better to say "more than", than "over".
  • particularly tobacco, timber and skins
Does "skins" refer to animal hides?
  • and warehouses could be used by private enterprise
Were these sold at that time?
  • but put on hold by Norman Fowler in 1979
Readers might find it helpful to know who Fowler was.
Opening and extensions
  • Sites for stations at Carmen Street (later Langdon Park) and Pudding Mill Lane were safeguarded
What is meant by "safeguarded"?
Conclusion

Seems pretty thorough and well-written. I'm not sure the prose is all that engaging, but maybe its difficult to achieve that with material that tends to be a bit dry. Be sure parts aren't overly detailed, which might be contributing to reader fatigue. Its a nice piece overall that I'm sure represents the topic well. Nicely done. Keep up the great work! RO(talk) 17:12, 18 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]