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Land of the Lost (1974 television series)

This article is vast, and explores many different aspects of the show. I want to see if any improvements need to be made, and if so, what. This is my first Peer Review (hopefully not my last). Thanks, [[User:Mysekurity|Mysekurity]] ^{[[additions | e-mail]]}_{21:45, 11 September 2005 (UTC)}[reply]

A good start. Here's a few comments.

The prolific Krofft team was very influential in children's television, producing many oddly formatted, highly energetic, and special-effects heavy programs. appears rather opinionated. I suggest you remove it and quickly mention some other shows the two made.
The lead section is too short. I suggest you merge the overview section into it.
Nowhere in the article does it state how the Marshall's ended up in that world.
I would mention the Marshall's before discussing the natives (because they are the main characters) and the other visitors afterwards.
The images need fair use rationales.
There's no reference section which shows what sources were used to write the article. This needs to be seperate section from the external links.
The article could use a copyedit as there's a lot of hard to read long sentences. - Mgm|^(talk) 09:32, September 12, 2005 (UTC)

Thanks, I'll try to see what I can do. As for the "images need[ing] fair use rationales", I'm not exactly sure what to write when it comes to this, is it on the photo tutorial? I'm running the piece over with a fine-tooth comb, and your sugguestions will be taken to heart. Thanks, [[User:Mysekurity|Mysekurity]] ^{[[additions | e-mail]]}_{00:11, 13 September 2005 (UTC)}[reply]

I wrote the majority of the current article and the main source I used was the DVD box sets for the first two seasons - I watched them and took notes as I went ( I've got the third season and have been meaning to give this article a reworking/expansion in light of it, but keep putting it off for various reasons). I put the references within the text of the article, indicating which episodes various facts were established in. I also have the "series bible" written by David Gerrold before production began, but it's pretty minimalist and some of the details directly conflict with what was eventually filmed so I haven't used it as a reference except in a few specifically mentioned cases. Bryan 06:23, 14 September 2005 (UTC)[reply]

It's a bit unwieldy. Some of the information on the characters could probably do with being split off into sub-pages. Also the lead is far too short – it doesn't even tell us which country this series is from, let alone what channel it aired on. Also, there seems to be hardly anything about the behind-the-scenes crew or production history of the series, writers, producers, etc. I think that any decent Wikipedia television series article needs that sort of information. (Indeed, I'd argue that a decent Wikipedia TV article should be *mosly* that sort of information, but that's a purely personal view). Angmering 18:02, 14 September 2005 (UTC)[reply]