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Hurricane John (1994)

I've put significant effort into improving this article recently. There isn't any more information available to add, and everything there is well-sourced and exhaustive. Unfortunately, I haven't been able to find any other images of John, but that isn't too surprising given that it was a Pacific hurricane in 1994, before serious observations began. Just looking for some comments before a possible FAC run. —C uivi é nen^T|C|@ on Tuesday, 30 May 2006 at 02:26 UTC

All the following are minor suggestions:

Per WP:MOSNUM, at Units of measurement, numbers with SI units of measure should have conversions in US customary units and vice versa. These conversions should keep to similar values of precision. For example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth". Note that the converted unit of measure uses a standard abbreviation, while the source unit is spelled out in the text.

Per WP:MOSNUM, there should be a no-break space -   between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.

Per WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.

As is done in WP:FOOTNOTE, for footnotes, the footnote should be located right after the punctuation mark, such that there is no space inbetween. For example, change blah blah [2]. to blah blah.[2]

This article can use copyediting to ensure that the it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. For example,
- The United States' National Hurricane Center (NHC) later identified the precursor to Hurricane John was a tropical wave identified that the
- sheared cleared away most of the clouds shear cleared away
- and perhaps other copyediting fixes for grammar/spelling are needed.
There are a couple of inconsistincies among dates:

Dates should use either 0 or 2 commas, depending upon the subject of the article; American-related articles should use 2 commas, while British-related articles generally used 0 commas. For example, for two commas: In January 15, 2006, this and that happened, while for zero commas, use: In January 15 2006 this and that happened.
Sometimes 22 August is used, other times August 22 is used; since this is mostly about a US topic it should probably be August 22.
Link shear to Wind shear.

Please alphabetize the categories and interlanguage links.

There are a few sections that are too short and that should be either expanded or merged. For example, Lack of retirement is/are a bit short.

Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at WP:GTL.
Thanks, AndyZ _t 14:03, 30 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

- I've fixed most of these issues; I left the "lack of retirement" subsection as that has become fairly standard formatting for tropical cyclone articles in general. —C uivi é nen^T|C|@ on Tuesday, 30 May 2006 at 22:49 UTC

Regarding dates: That is totally incorrect; if you have a preference set in your preferences, the date will always show your pref. Changing it won't help. NSL E _(T+C) at 23:59 UTC (2006-05-30)

Oh, thank you for saying that. I was wondering why the August 22's looked exactly alike. I think the storm history is too long. Ways to cut down on that include removing all references to land impacts (that's what impact is for) and moving the records out (like the mention of Carmen and Skip). Hurricanehink (talk) 00:14, 31 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]