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Forensic Entomology: Stages of Decomposition

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because we would like to get some feedback on the different sections of the article and whre they might be improved. We are also looking for a more explicit title so that this page is easier to find when searching in the human decomposition realm. And with much improvement, we are looking for featured article status.

Thanks, Amandamartinez06 (talk) 19:08, 26 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

• The page needs renaming to something like "Forensic entomological stages of decomposition".
• Work out the merger issue.
• Expand the lead per WP:LEAD and don't recapitalise Forensic, it's not a proper noun.
• Read WP:HEAD to avoid over capitalising headings so Black Putrefaction becomes Black putrefaction.
• Citations that ref the web should use {{cite web}}.
• A lot of subsectioning. Perhaps merge the small sections or expand them.
• A lot of jargon - explain or wikilink.
• Avoid using the gallery - add the images where appropriate.
• Don't use inline web links such as Phormia regina - link to Wikipedia or use references.
• Article has no categories.

Enough from me. The Rambling Man (talk) 19:42, 29 March 2008 (UTC)

More comments

• Image captions are overcaptialised, and should be sized per WP:MOS#Images, i.e. without forcing a pixel width - just use thumb.
• You don't need to separate paras with br's, just a carriage return, line feed... will do.
• In the references, don't just link a raw URL, use the {{cite web}} template. If you need a hand with this, drop me a line.
• The "Factors" section is a little too chopped up into sections. Either expand the sections or reduce the number of them by merging.
• Not sure about "Conclusion", this is an encyclopaedic article, not a science paper.

That's it for this round! The Rambling Man (talk) 07:09, 2 April 2008 (UTC)