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Foot binding

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to make it into a good article, but I'm unsure how else to do so. I believe the best way to achieve this goal is through peer review.

Thanks, OpalYosutebito (talk) 13:58, 16 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll conduct a mini GA review, although the broadness criterion with these articles is always the most important.

I'll note before I continue that if you were to nominate the article, you would need to either add more information to the page, or ask Hzh if it's okay to nominate (or, in my preference, co-nominate). This is because if you have < 10% authorship / < 5th in authorship, the review will be considered a drive-by (see footnote [a]). It's also just good to do this, because you need to have familiarity with the sources. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 02:04, 8 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose and content

The prose in the lede can be improved by making sentences less stumpy, particularly in the stretch following "Foot binding eventually..."
In the late 19th century, Christian missionaries and Chinese reformers to make this sentence flow better, add "While" to the beginning and restructure around this
Some redundancy in prose:

upper-class and urban women dropped the practice ~~of foot binding~~ sooner
By 2007, only a ~~small~~ handful

Some helpful wikilinks: consort, golden lotus, Padmavati, Kangxi Emperor, bond-servants
In the story, Pan Yunu this sentence is overly long
Li Yu created as with this one
and the excessive smallness of the feet clarify if this was an ideal seen later here as it is a bit confusing.
men would drink from a special shoe, the heel of which contained a small cup. reword this sentence so as not to mislead upfront
Contrary to missionary writings... this sentence needs a source at the end to meet GA's verifiability requirements.
However the rebellion failed and Christian missionaries this bit reads confusingly, as the activity of Christian missionaries also reads as bound in the "however" modifier
placing emphasis on the fact → emphasizing
Christian women ~~in Xiamen~~ attended a meeting
called into doubt the whole of Chinese civilization as in whether it was civilized, or whether it was stable?
You'll have to clean up the citation needed and failed verification tags before nominating.
and leading intellectuals of the May Fourth Movement saw same as "However the rebellion" comments
bound ~~only~~ until marriage
The broken toes were held tightly against the sole of the foot... Is this paragraph sourced to the next inline source? If so it needs to be copied here.
Unsure where apostrophes should go in footnote a.
In the Song dynasty the status... this sentence is quite wordy
It has been noted that Confucian doctrine in fact prohibits probably errs into editorialising here
Foot binding is an oppressive practice against women who were victims of a sexist culture. every other perspective was attributed; i.e. "a common argument is that". Attribute.
and a major event in the history of Chinese feminism. citation needed
disappeared in China ~~forever~~ after two generations
as it was then practised only by Han women don't you say earlier that it was also practiced by Hui Muslims?
The tag in the In literature, film, and television section will merit this article a quickfail if it is nominated with it remaining. If there are entries that are not sourced, a secondary source should be found to reach Good Article's verifiability requirements, and prevent WP:INDISCRIMINATE / MOS:MISC.

Suggestions

then in 1638 → again in 1638
Resolve inconsistency in linking of provinces in but less so in parts of southern China... and next sentence
causing injuries to the toes → cause
There are many interpretations ~~to the practice~~ of foot binding

Images

File:Bundesarchiv Bild 116-127-075, China, Tsingtau-Chinesin.jpg should be tagged as PD-100
File:Chaussure chinoise Saverne 02 05 2012 1.jpg as above
File:Feet of a Chinese woman, showing the effect of foot-binding.jpg Do more research into this. The PD tagging on the source website cannot be relied on.
File:Woman with bound feet reclining on chaise lounge, China LCCN2001705601.jpg fix the date of creation

Sources

I don't imagine you are very familiar with the sources given your authorship. You should do a spot check to gain some familiarity. A spot check can look like this in a recent GA review I conducted.

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 01:15, 8 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your feedback! I'll be sure to get to work ASAP! - OpalYosutebito (talk) 03:27, 8 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]