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I've listed this article for peer review because I hope it might be worthy of WP:GA status at some point! I've been the only editor on it so far, though, so I would love a second third pair of eyes on it to help me see how to make it better. — Shrinkydinks (talk) 02:51, 19 January 2020 (UTC)
- @Shrinkydinks: I'll give this one a go.
- The lede should provide a more thorough summary of the entire article.
A cappella, and especially collegiate a cappella, has its roots in covers of popular music.
I think the should be elaborated upon a touch. "Has its roots" how?- A word or phrase should only be linked once in a given article. I've fixed this for you.
- There was some overuse of colons. I've corrected these.
- The quote from Elie Landau,
somewhere between the eccentric intellectualism of The Bobs and the somewhat more boisterous, more simplistic Da Vinci's Notebook
, doesn't make sense to those who don't know the bands he's referencing. Some context is needed here. - I'm not familiar with what the "blend" is in music production. Is this different than the mix? You might want to add a note here on what this term means.
- I think you need to rethink the "shift in identity" that happened to the group after the album. It sounds like what you're trying to get across is that they wrote more original songs after the album and downplayed humor in their music. You might just say that without characterizing it as a shift in identity.
- I have some concerns about original research that I've added inline templates for.
- The article overall is a bit thin. You may want to consider adding material about the recording and production, release and promotion, and any tours that happened around the release.
- You might find the manual of style for WikiProject Albums to be useful.
- An interesting article on an interesting album. Thanks for the work you put in on this one! Qono (talk) 03:29, 21 January 2020 (UTC)